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Most people watch Channel One NEWS at 6PM


septiadara29 48 / 67 9  
Nov 20, 2016   #1
The graph below shows the average daily figures for Channel One News over a 12-month period

A breakdown of the information about the average daily figures for watching Channel One News during a 12-month period is represented in the line graph. It is measured in millions of viewers per day. Overall, it is noticable that most people watch this channel at 6 pm although a large number of watcher tended to see at 11 pm in August.

Initially, except for the 11 pm figure, others daily time had been started since January. The number of viewers at 9.30 pm increased gradually by almost 1 to approximately 4 in May while the 6 pm figure went up and down. However, the quantity of watcher at 1 pm remained unchanged between January and December at around 1.2.

Concerning to the new section, the 11 pm number started in May, and surprisingly it increased steeply at 4 over a 4-month period. On the contray, there was a sudden decrease in the number of watcher at 9.30 pm at close to 1 during the same period, but it experienced to rise again until December. Meanwhile, there was a downward trend in the 6 pm number, and it bottomed at rougly 3 in December. (193)




ichanpants89 [Contributor] 16 / 777 309  
Nov 20, 2016   #2
Septia, I believe this is another well-written piece of work from you. I can see that you have taken my previous feedback into account. This essay depicts information clearly about the graph and summarizes all the main features comprehensively. Yet, I can still notice some rooms for improvements. I hope the detailed descriptions below would help you.

- ...a 12-month period is re presented in the line graph. (see the difference between represents and presents)
- ...it is noticablenoticeable that most people watch this channel at 6 pm although a large number of watcherwatcherstended to seewatch their TVs at 11 pm in August. (tend to = not yet happen, watch = there's an action)

- ... othersother daily time...
- ...increased gradually byfrom almost 1 to approximately 4 in...
- However, the quantity of watcherS at 1 pm remained unchanged..

- On the contraycontrary , there was a...
- ... it bottomed at rough ly 3 in December.

Hope this helps :)


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