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Task 1 - Perceived and Actual Crime in 2009 and 2010

wahyutri13 10 / 13  
Feb 8, 2016   #1
The bar chart illustrates the data regarding the prediction damage and actual dangerous of criminal victim. The data set is took over 2-year period started from 2009 to 2010 and is measured in percentage. There are three type of criminal case such Burglary, Car Crime, and Violent Crime. It is noticeable that Car Crime was the most dangerous crime both perceived and actual crime in 2009 and 2010. Therefore, actual crime was a lowest proportion in all of three type of crime.

First of all, perceived Car Crime was the highest crime occurred in 2009 at level more than 20%. Next, the forecast of Burglary and Violent Crime were roughly same proportion at around 15%. Moreover, in 2010 the criminal action had a same pattern that perceived Car Crime led a number of crimes at around 17% and the next position Burglary and Violent Crime were at the level almost 15%.

Furthermore, the real action crime for three type of criminal was in the minimal percentage at less than 5%. In 2009, the proportion of Car Crime was a third of the perceived Burglary in 2010 at around 5%.

eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,208 476  
Feb 8, 2016   #2
This bar chart examines the proportion of people's perceptions of being a victim of crime in comparison with the actual risks involved over tho periods, 2009/10 and 2010/11

Overall, by far the highest figure relate to car crime. The figures for perception of the threat of crime have shown a marked fall in all categories over the period in the question

It seems that you struggle for the overview. As seen, the way you present it looks complicated
fariz10 13 / 18 2  
Feb 8, 2016   #3
Hi Wahyu,

I found some grammatical error and the most important you did not illustrate the graph properly.

In my opinion, you have to look at the graph carefully. it should started from 2009 to 2011.

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