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Percentage of British people giving money to a charity.


thutyedaniel 32 / 38 17  
May 29, 2015   #1
The chart below gives information on the percentage of British people giving money to charity by age range for the years 199 and 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.


The bar chart illustrates a breakdown of the proportion of British citizen who give money to charity in different ages between 1990 and 2010. At first glance, it is evident that the biggest contribution to charity saw people aged 36-50 in 1990. However, in 2010, people aged 51-65 gain a massive.

According to the bar chart, it is shows that the proportion of British people experienced a dramatic increase from the age 18-50, while there was a significant decline at over the next ages in 1990. The percentages of British people stood at around 16 per cent (18-25), and then it increased dramatically at some 44 per cent (36-50). Unfortunately, British people aged 51-65 and >65 decrease significantly at about 32 per cent of the time in question.

Moving to a more detailed analysis from the bar chart, it is reveals that generally the percentage of British people giving charity experienced a slightly incline in 2010. British people ages 18-25 stood at under ten per cent, whilst increased dramatically at approximately 40 per cent in people aged 5-65 and people ages >65 had fallen back at 35 per cent in people aged 36-50.




justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Jun 4, 2015   #2
- At first glance, it is evident that the biggest contribution to charity saware people aged 36-50 in 1990.

- However, in 2010, people aged 51-65 gain a massive increase.

- According to the bar chart, it is shows that the proportion of British people experienced a dramatic increase from the age 18-50,...

- The percentagespercentage of British people stood at around 16 percent (18-25), and then it increased dramatically at some 44 percent (36-50).

- Moving to a more detailed analysis from the bar chart, it is reveals that generally the percentage of British people giving charity experienced a slightlyslight incline in 2010.

Daniel, this analysis is as detailed as it can be, so good job!!
I have made a few very minor corrections, also please mind the following;

- "percent" is one word

- when referring to an ongoing action, use the present form of the verb

Keep writing

Cheers!!!


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