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Percentage of spending on different needs in several European countries in 2002

Reza_Hidayat 13 / 18 1  
Apr 25, 2017   #1

consumers money spending for their needs

The table illustrates information about the percentage of spending on different needs in several Europe Countries in 2002. Overall, all countries spent much more money on Foods/Drinks/Tobacco.

Food/Drinks/Tobacco figure occupied the highest proportion of people spending in all countries. It could be seen that all countries spent on more than 15% for that. Furthermore, Turkey as the highest proportion, spent on 32.14%, and followed by Ireland, Spain, Italy and Sweden. Meanwhile, Clothing/Footwear figure was lower than Food/Drinks/Tobacco figure since they only spent on less than 10%. Moreover, the highest percentage of Clothing/Footwear figure was spent by Italy of 9.00%.

However, Leisure/Education figure was the minority of consumer spending. They only spent on more than 4% by Turkey as the highest spending while their lowest spending was 1,98% by Spain. All countries spent on less than 5% for that. This is quite different with Food/Drinks/Tobacco figure and Clothing/Footwear figure for they spent on more than 5% up to 30% of expenditure.

agus_mono 13 / 23 2  
Apr 27, 2017   #2
hy @Reza_Hidayat,
i have just read your essay.

in my view, several grammatical mistakes that you did in this essay, for example, 'spent on more than 15% for that', it is better if you say spent more than 15% on this. Furthermore, i think you have to find other work to show spending, because there are so many repetitions on this word. not only about word repetition, but also lack of structure variation yo did in this writing. you may stuck in 5 if you use such form, perhaps you can boost your sentence structure to get more than it.

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