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The percentage of young people in the UK who choose to eat vegetarian diet over the past fifty years


nabila05 8 / 12  
Apr 19, 2016   #1
IELTS Writing Task 1: UK adolescents following vegetarian diet

The graph illustrates the significant variation in the percentage of young people in the UK who choose to eat vegetarian diet over the past fifty years. It can be seen that the number of young people in UK who had vegetarian diets decreased after 1980 until the year 2000. Overall, the graph shows two main periods of interest in vegetarianism among adolescents in the UK: one peaking on 1980 and the second projected to peak approximately thirty years later in 2012.

In 1960, only a small percentage of adolescents (about 1 per cent) were vegetarian and followed by a steep increase until 1980 when it reached to over 15% which was the highest percentage of adolescents having vegetarian meals in the UK. Thereafter, it kept on declining with minor fluctuations until the year 2000 when it got a very small number. After 2000, this percentage gradually increased until nearly 2011 at above one in ten. It remained steady for the next following years and it is forecasted than that will remain almost same until 2020.




justivy03 - / 2,367 607  
Apr 19, 2016   #2
Hi Nabila, as seen in this analysis, you received a very comprehensive modification from our EF contributor and I hope you follow through.
What I like about your essay is that, you were able to use words that truly depicts what the analysis is trying to implicate. The analysis is pretty much a showcase of what you have understood in the graph, so you have to be very careful.

Moreover, you manage to keep the analysis to its facts and started very strong, the body of the essay is also very comprehensive and lastly, the conclusion and final sentences of the essay is written as strong as it started.

I hope the insights help and I wish to review more of your work in the coming days. For future writing reference, keep a good pacing on the flow of your ideas and maintain the simple approach towards every prompt or analysis that you answer.


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