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Percentages of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features


Bob brother 15 / 22  
Mar 4, 2017   #1

users of fancy mobile phones



The table shows the percentage of mobile phone owners using various mobile phone features between 2006 and 2010.

Throughout the period shown, the main purpose of using mobile phone is making calls. But after the years, technologies are increased and developed new function of mobile phones such as Internet and record video.

In 2006, each person used mobile phone for making calls and 73% of them used phones to send text messages and 66% of people used it to take photos. Less 20 % of people played games and music on their phones.There were no figures for users doing Internet searches and recording video.

In 2010, all were changed. Using Internet function was 44% in 2008 and would increase to 73% in 2010. There was also a significant rise in the use of mobile to play games and to record video, with figyres reaching 41% and 35% in 2010. Using phone to take photos and send messages is little changed.




mastindersingh 2 / 7 2  
Mar 5, 2017   #2
@Bob brother

You haven't covered decrease in phone calls in 2010.
I find it difficult to understand the last paragraph .Playing a game and making the call was reduced slightly in 2010 compare to 2008. Whereas record video function has increased but that is not reflected in your paragraph.

Less 20 % of people played games and music on their phones = Here you can use less than 20 percentage.
Holt [Contributor] - / 7,932 2187  
Mar 5, 2017   #3
Raimov, your overview summary needs more work. It would have been best if you combined the first paragraph with the second paragraph in order to create a more appropriate summary of the information in the report. While you reported on the figures for 2006 and 2010, you totally forgot to make a representation of the individualized data for the year 2008. That is the information in the middle of the chart, between 2006 and 2010. Without that information, the data you provided is incomplete, inconclusive, and misleading. Due to the grave mistake in your representation of the factual data you were provided to summarize, this essay cannot score higher than a 4. You must make sure to always double check the information in your summary based upon the figures you are provided. If anything is missing, your score will lose points and affect your overall score.


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