TED Summary : How to make work-life balance work
Nigel Marsh has ben having seven years experienced with studying and writing about worklife balance. First, progeress is most important to use effectively time with familiy. Second, government and corporation became the most important elements. They have solution for this issue for us. Every person has take the control and responsibility for the type of life that they want to lead. If you don't design your life, someone will take the control from others people. Although people need the idea to balance. Its particularly important, that people never put the quality of their life in other hand of the commercience proportion. Third, carefully with the limit time as a friend that people choose. Thus, detail step by step that description ideal balance. Approach the way in the balance purpose, that small things matter being more interesting effect for dramatically to the people in their life. With the smallest investasion in the right place people can get many aspects which are transform quality relationship and life.
Hi Andika, as I review your essay, I must say, right of the bat, you made sure that your essay is precise, written direct to the point and the best thing about it is the fact that it is very comprehensive, one paragraph summary that is very straight to the point.
One more thing, you labeled life's progress that is very well done, highlighting this information will help your readers find out and better understand the talk. You were able to convey the message to your readers properly and this is the most important part of the summary and your writing style.
Overall, there's still a lot to learn about life and it's just a matter of time until we will be able to balance life and we learn as we go along. For future reference, however, as much as it is a summary, you can go ahead and make it in a two part paragraph and that should leave the reader a breather in order for them to grasp the information that you portray in the article.
It is such a great Essay, Those are the corrections for your essay :
Nigel Marsh has
ben ( been ) having seven-year experience with in studying and writing about work- life balance. First, progeressprogress is the most important to use effectively time with family (Such a complicated sentence, make it simple ").
... most important elements (avoid using the most important, because it has to be the only one due to superlative ). They have solution
for this issue for us. Every person has to take the control and ...
If you don't
design (maintain/regulate ) your life, someone ...
You have to pay attention about purpose of your sentence and make it simple
Thanks hope it is useful for you
You have a nice topic to share with as, but here some suggestions for you.
1. Nigel Marsh has
benbeen having seven years experiencedexperience with studying and writing about worklifework-life balance.
progeressprogress is the most important thing to use...
For the very first, he stated that progress is the most important thing to use ...
3. They have solution for this issue
4. Every person has to take the control (...) they want to
5. from the other
6. Although people need to
the idea to balance the idea
7. Thus, detail step by step that description ideal balance.
Thus, this step by step clearly describes ideal balance.
the smallest investasiona small investation in the right place , people can get....