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IELTS-TASK1 : Persons Arrested in Five Years ending 1994


Nofrinorman 27 / 17 8  
Nov 6, 2015   #1
The charts show the different percentage of individuals arrested along with several accusations over five years in the end of 1994. Overall, it can be seen that despite the figures of males arrested proportion is higher than female, the largest percentage seemed to uncaught persons in various cases.

At first glance, public drinking case becomes the most infraction that individuals carried out, especially females reached over 36.5% whereas males are approximately 31%. Then the second case is drink driving which is more dominated by men around 26% than women solely under 15%. Next the third case is assault, it is unexpected as the bar chart illustrates that females lead to number of presentation over 19% and males by 3%.

Turning to breach of order and theft, males have similar ratio by 3% from 17% which the figures of percentage display that males are greater, while the females have similar percentage around 13%. The last, other reasons rather equalize the ratio of violations that mentioned under 20% and the lowest proportion is without answer which males around 4.5% and females over 5.5%.




wulanaulia 1 / 4  
Nov 7, 2015   #2
Hai nofrinorman. Youre writing already good, but i just have a little correction. Enjoy your day 😊😊

... 36.5% whereas males arewere approximately 31%. Then the second case is drinkdouble verb driving which is more ... Next the third case isI think should use past tense, because it talk about individual arrested in 1994 assault, it is unexpected as the bar chart illustrates that females lead to number of presentation over 19% and males by 3%.
LonaRandan 1 / 2  
Nov 7, 2015   #3
The charts show the different percentage of individuals arrested along with several accusations over five years in the end of 1994. Overall, it can be seen that despitethis is preposition, should be followed with noun phrase, you can change with Although the figures of males arrested proportion is higher than female, the largest percentage seemed to uncaught persons in various cases.
akbarmappiare 31 / 469 275  
Nov 10, 2015   #4
Hi Norman...
Your writing is good..
I try to look your writing closer. I will give you few suggestions.

The charts show the different percentage of individuals arrested along with several accusations over five years in the end of 1994. (You should explain into two chart, for example: The number of people detained between 1990 and 1991 is revealed in the pie charts, and the rate per motive for most recent detainee is displayed in the bar chart). Overall, it can be seen that despite the figures of males arrested proportion is higher than female, the largest percentage seemed to uncaught persons in various cases. ( You should need a sentence to a paragraph)

At first glance, public drinking casethe case of public drinking becomes the most infraction that individuals carried out, especially females reached over 36.5% whereas males are were approximately 31%. Then the second casethe case of the second highestiswas drink driving which is more dominated by men around 26% than women solely under 15%. Next the third case is assault, it is unexpected as the bar chart illustrates that females lead to number of presentation over 19% and males by 3%.
broibra 17 / 19 3  
Nov 10, 2015   #5
Hi, let me try to give you some suggestion for this writing.

... the most infractions that individuals carried ...

... case is drink driving, which is more ...

Next the third case is assaultassaulted , it is unexpected as the bar chart illustrates that females lead to a number of presentationpresentations over 19% and males by 3%.


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