Hi Miss Sarlinda.
These are my corrections for your essayToday, the electronic media usage
of BY common people becomeS an essential thing ...
... become depending on THE electronic media
usage as a part of their necessary IN THE WHOLE
all the time
in every day .
Because of OWING TO benefits an ...
Somehow, I believe the presence of the electronic media gave us many ...(Please, focus on the question because there displayed the prompts which will guide you to explain)... the people keep their relationship
by remote communication with their colleagues IN A REMOTE AREA.
... communication with THE family in other ...
... media such as THE mobile phone, laptop and notebook
were ARE launched with any features
which supporting communication (...) because the people
now THESE DAYS can download any ...
For example,
a THE mobile phone or notebook
which completeD with online access ...
Note: Well, I have read your essay closely. I got the conclusion that you only review your reasons why you disagree with the statement. However, you have to uderstand deeply the question
To what extent do you agree or disagree?
You should also explain that if you agree with the statement, you have the reason. be careful of this matter because it relates to the task responses.
However, you have show the postistive progress. I firmly believe that you can master this skill. You only need providing the time to practice more and more.
keep Spirit
Happy Writing
GOOD LUCK