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The picture illustrates some parts of a house where air is absorbed and released.


nurainiyusuf16 47 / 83 6  
Nov 2, 2016   #1
The diagram below shows how heat is lost and energy wasted in a house because of air getting into and out of the house.

The picture illustrates some parts of a house where air absorb and release. Then, how heat and energy is lost. Overall, it can be seen that leaking of air happened into and out the house.

One of pathways that show air leaking into house is in dryer event which is located in basement. There are two ways of air to leaking into this room which are by pipe and ventilation. In the same floor, outdoor faucet also become one way to air enters. By the tap, air throughout and enters to the room. Move to the first floor, air leaking into three areas. First, in the bathroom by electrical outlet. Second, in the main room by window, door, and fireplace. The last is in the kitchen room where air leaking out by kitchen fan event and the window.

Leaking out of air happen in the balcony part. Some of parts which are release heat are tan event and recessed lights in bathroom. The next part is plumbing stack vent which throughout from basement until the rooftop. Other part is attic hatch in the first floor middle room and the top of fireplace as well. Then, recessed lights in kitchen area.




Ilmi_03 47 / 69 11  
Nov 2, 2016   #2
Hello, Aini :)
Here are some additional suggestions for you.

Concerning on the first paragraph:
It is always better if you can form complete sentence.
Also, try to write two sentences in the overview which represent the main idea of the first and the second paragraphs.

Pay more attention to passive sentences.

... parts of a house in where air is absorbed and releasedwhich cause lost of heat and energy.

The second paragraph:
You can use some discourse markers, which I could not found in this paragraph, in order to maintain the flow of your sentences.
Ensure that you have used subject and verb in the appropriate way.


There are some pathways where the air leaks into the house. One of them is in the dryer event located in the basement in which the air passes through the pipe and ventilators. In the same floor, also, there a tap in the outdoor faucet which allows the air to enter the room. Move to the first floor, the air fills three different rooms via various leaking holes. Firstly, it comes to the bathroom by the electrical outlet, and then it fills the main room passing through the window, the door and the fireplace. The last is in the kitchen room where the air leaks out by kitchen fan event and another window.


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