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The pie chart compares the amount of average consumption of family in one country from 1950 to 2010.


Syahrul08 3 / 2 1  
Jan 21, 2016   #1
The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in a country in 1950 and 2010

The pie chart compares the amount of average consumption of family in one country from 1950 to 2010 compared by percentage. Overall, it can be seen that the largest change were in the percentage of consumption to the housing and food. All of consumption of family was increase until in the end period.

In 1950, the most favorite expenditure of people was housing, representing stood at 72.1% which was over a half of all consumption, and it was dramatic decrease in 2010 by just 22 per cent. People consumed food at 11.2%, it was the second largest of consumption and increasing more than threefold in 2010 at 34.0 per cent. Initially, average expenditures of people in the country on education, transportation, health care and other were fairly low, at only around just under seven per cent each.

Interestingly, in 2010, people used transportation increase enormously more than around fourth fold, at 14.0 per cent. The household spent of health care and education which were nearly changed not significantly. But consumption of family from other increased considerably from around four per cent to 19.2 per cent.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 21, 2016   #2
... of A family in one country ... AS compared by percentage. ... percentage of consumption MONEY SPENT ON to the housing and food. All of consumption of THE family was increase INCREASED until in the end OF THE period.

... the most favorite BASIC expenditure of people was housing, representing stood at 72.1% ... a half of all consumption EXPENSES, and it was SAW A dramatic decrease in 2010 by just 22 per cent %. People consumed SPENT ON food at 11.2%, i... largest of consumption EXPENSE and increasing INCREASED more than ... 34.0 per cent %... education, transportation, health care, and otherS were fairly low, at only around just under seven per cent each. 7 % EACH.

- When you start out with the percent sign, use the percent sign throughout the essay. do not keep shifting from the sign to the word. It gets confusing to read. Consistency is important in any report. Also percent is one word, not two.

... enormously at more than around a fourth fold... spent of ON health care ... were nearly NOT SIGNIFICANTLY changed not significantly. But consumption of THE family from other ON OTHER EXPENSES increased considerably ... four per cent to 19.2 per cent. 4% TO 19.2 %


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