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IELTS Task 1 The Pie Charts represent the precentages of changes in the annual dependents


hanasufiarahma 3 / 4  
Dec 28, 2016   #1
The Pie charts represents the precentages of changes in the annual dependent such as Higher Education, Transportation, Environmental Services, K-12, Health and Human Resources and Others by local government in several lands between 1980, 1990, and 2000. All in all, higher education was the highest precentage from start point until the last period. However, others in the following years significantly decline.

In 1980 until 1990, higher education was the highest precentage from 35% to 45% and at 2000 decreased became 40%. Transportation in 1980 was 16% and decreased became 6% in 1990, but in the end period was increase became 22%.

Every periods, environmental services always increased respectively from 4%, 5%, to 9%. K-12 Education had a decrease trends in every years, from 25%, 20%, to 18%. Health and Human Resource had a some trends with higher education that increased in the middle years from 14% to 20% and decreased at the end period became 10%. In 1980, others was 6% and the following years decreased from 4% to 1%.
OP hanasufiarahma 3 / 4  
Dec 28, 2016   #2
This is Pie Charts for my writing task :)



ded15 6 / 9 1  
Dec 28, 2016   #3
Hello Hana
I have some advice for you :

- The Pie charts represents the precentages (...) such as Higher Education, ...(higher education, transportation, environmental services, K-12, health and human resources and others) by local government ...

( I suggest you to pay attention about "Subject Verb Agreement" and you should not write all of the sections by capital letter in the first letter)

- All in all, higher education was the highest precentage from start point until the last period. However, others in the following years significantly decline.
( from the pie charts we can see that not only higher education which experienced increasing, but also transportation and enviromental service experienced it as well )


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