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Pie charts - Result of surveys of visitor satisfaction-IELTS Writing task 1

Rhiza 1 / -  
Aug 18, 2019   #1

comment on tourists enjoyment - Ashdown Museum

Writing Task 1: The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied the were with their visit, during two periods.

The pie charts compare the number of people who feel satisfied toward Ashdown Museum before and after the refurbishment as well as the comparison how much people visit the museum.

Overall, there was an improvement in the number of people who felt satisfied with the museum after the establishment. It was shown by a remarkable increase in the fraction of satisfied visitors and a decline in unsatisfied visitors.

Before the refurbishment, the survey accounted for 40% dissatisfied people of the total visitors. Meanwhile only fifteen percent felt satisfied with the museum. The proportion therefore declined from the highest fraction (40%) to a smaller percentage (15%).

In contrast, the museum experienced a sudden growth of visitors after the refurbishment. Initially, the proportion of people is around 15% of very satisfied visitors and it increased to reach more than a third of the total. The visitors were measured 92000 while it was only around 72000 before the refurbishment, a drop of 20 thousand people.

jocelyne001 9 / 21 13  
Aug 19, 2019   #2

I think the essay is generally good, only a little suggestion. Maybe you can try to change some use of words like refurbishment and satisfied into other synonyms because it seems a little repetitive.

Hope my suggestion is helpful for you~
amira11545 8 / 15 5  
Aug 24, 2019   #3
Before the refurbishment, ...
It should have been " the survey reported that dissatisfied people accounted for 40% of the total visitors"

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