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Pie Fish production starts from delivering, clean and manufacturing, and wrapping


ilankelo21 36 / 41 22  
Feb 4, 2016   #1
The given picture elucidates the production process of pie fish. At first glance, it can be seen that the process consists of three phases, starting from delivering, clean and manufacturing, and wrapping. In this following essay all these processes will be described in detail.

In the first step, potatoes and salmon fish are delivered into the factory. This delivering process has different length in some extent. To keep fish remained fresh, its sending process has to spend less than 12 hours, while potatoes can be sent in a month as this round white vegetable can survive longer. When moving to the second phase, both salmon and potatoes are cleaned. In this time, disposal materials from fish are classified, while potatoes are pealed then sliced into several thinner parts in the provided machine. When salmon fish have already been poured with peas and sauce, potatoes come as the last material. It is thus it can be seen that the compound of fish pie is peas, fish, sauce and potato.

Turning the wrapping process, the pie fish which are derived from manufacturing process then are wrapped by using wrap machine for particular time. Before storing in the box, the wrapped pie fish are frozen to secure the food from existing bacteria and keep them remain longer.



vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Feb 4, 2016   #2
The given picture DIAGRAM elucidates the production process of MANUFACTURING pie fish... wrapping. In this following essay all these processes will be described in detail.

-You are to present an overview summary of the report or chart. This is not to be treated like an essay since it offers previously existing information. Do not make any reference to this being a simple essay.

... salmon fish are delivered in to the factory. This delivering DELIVERY process has different length TIME LENGTHS TO in some extent. To keep fish remained fresh, its sending process has to spend BE less than 12 hours, while potatoes can be sent in a month as this round white vegetable ... In DURING this time, disposal DISPOSABLE materials from fish are classified, while potatoes are pealed PEELED then sliced... in the provided SLICING machine. When salmon fish have already been poured with peas and sauce HAVE BEEN ADDED TO THE SALMON, potatoes come IN as the last material INGREDIENT. It is thus it can be seen that the compound INGREDIENTS of fish pie is ARE peas, fish, sauce and potatoES.

Turning AS FOR the wrapping process, the pie fish which are derived from THE manufacturing process then are wrapped by using A wrap machine for particular time . Before storing in the box, the wrapped pie fish are frozen to secure the food from existing bacteria and keep them remain FRESH longer.

You need to extend certain paragraphs to have at least 3 sentences as required by the format guidelines. Your use of English words are quite limited and your vocabulary, when you try to use more complicated words, are not exactly the right ones to use so I replaced those with the correct words. Overall, you still have vast room for improvement before taking your test.


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