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IELTS TASK 1 - plan to build new supermarket in the city of Garlsdon.


Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 13, 2014   #1
Question:
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
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Answer:
The map below shows town of Garlsdon where has population 65,000. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town.

In general, site plan establishing supermarket (S2) more possible than choice site shop store (S1).

The first possible area for the supermarket (S1) is riveting where it has several cities consist of 25 km to Cransdon has population as big as 29,000 people, and 16 km to Brandsdon consist of population 15,000 persons. Therefore, if many persons in around build of supermarket, I think they will come many benefits for it because many people need some food, dress or others for their family. With the result, they will visit supermarket for buying it. Then, they will choose place which is nearer because some people in around there work in the office industry and they just have a little time. Furtheremore, they have not opportunity to go place far distance. However, S1 has fewer society in around that it is consist of 10,000 society of 12 km to Hindon.

Overall, Carlsdon has opportunity for building supermarket in the town centre. It is place strategy place for many people in around.




BOMAT_IRA 29 / 40  
Apr 13, 2014   #2
Therefore, if many persons in around build of supermarket, I think they will come many benefits for it because many people need some food, dress or others for their family.

Suggestion: I think, they will give many benefits...
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 13, 2014   #3
The map below shows town of Garlsdon wherewhich has a population of 65,000 people . A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town.
This is the intro I suggest for you;
The map below shows the details of Garlsdon town.

In general, site plan establishing supermarket (S2) more possible than choice site shop store (S1).

.... This is not indicated in the map... you should report what is presented in the map and not your conclusions.
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Apr 13, 2014   #5
Hey, I just found the full prompt from another thread for this task and it is ;
The map below is of the town of Garlsdon. A new supermarket (S) is planned for the town. The map shows two possible sites for the supermarket.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

If this is so, then the intro should be more detailed;
The map presents the lay out of Garlsdon town and the identified sites for the proposed new supermarket.

This is why I always suggest everybody to include the prompt. Then we can provide you with more meaningful comments :)
OP Eva Novita Sari 47 / 71 2  
Apr 13, 2014   #6
Answer:
The map below shows the details of Garlsdon town of Garlsdon which has a population of 65,000 people.

In general, site plan establishing supermarket (S1) and S2 are crossed by railway and S1 is more far distance from society than S2.

The first possible area for the supermarket (S1) is riveting where it has several cities consist of 25 km to Cransdon has population as big as 29,000 people, and 16 km to Brandsdon consist of population 15,000 persons. Therefore, if many persons in around build of supermarket, I think they will come many benefits for it because many people need some food, dress or others for their family. With the result, they will visit supermarket for buying it. Then, they will choose place which is nearer because some people in around there work in the office industry and they just have a little time. Furtheremore, they have not opportunity to go place far distance. However, S1 has fewer society in around that it is consist of 10,000 society of 12 km to Hindon.

In short, Carlsdon has opportunity for building supermarket in the town centre. It is place strategy place for many people in around.
eddies [Contributor] 25 / 1,197 460  
Apr 14, 2014   #7
Thanks to Google, here is information regarding Maps in IELTS:

Generally there are two types of maps in the IELTS test. First, they may give us two maps of the same place but in different times (e.g 1940, 2010). They ask us to write a report on how this place had changed over time. Let's call such maps diachronic. Second, they give us one single map and ask us to describe two locations on them or even compare them. Let's call them synchronic maps.

Diachronic maps
Intro: here you should state what the maps show
Overview: state what the direction of change is (is the city more modernized, has it turned to a tourist attraction/resort, etc)
Body: start with the most obvious changes and then try to cover all the changes.

Synchronic maps.
Intro: here you should state what the maps show
Overview: depending on what the purpose of those points are, give an opinion about which one may serve our purpose better.
Body: compare the two points


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