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Plan a problem and solution essay for the issue that you chose, explaining what should be done about


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Jun 19, 2021   #1

trees are being cut down massively



It is said that every countries and governments are facing several problems which are one of all is deforestation, a problematic and serious issue.
This is a situation in which the trees are being cut down and a great many negative consequences are formed. Initially, deforestation underpins the global warming process because the carbon dioxide will not be held by the plants. Secondly, it will accelerate the speed of the water of the rain causing flood and erosion. Finally, the forests are the house of a wide range of various animals and plants in the ecosystem; therefore, cutting down trees endangers the wild species. This problem should be urgently solved firstly by the government and then <del></del>by the citizens.

One of our group's possible solutions is that the authorities should organise campaigns to raise the residents' awareness by giving speeches about the essence of the jungles and adverse effect of deforestation, but not giving the leaflets which can lead to the littering status.

Another suggestion is punishment should be carried out: one year of doing public activities per one tree. Although this could be a suitable solution, we have argued that this is not appropriate advice. Our group members have indicated that the illegal foresters will hide and run, additionally, governments don't have enough policemen to supervise the forests and this is an adversity.

In summary, instead of implementing the disciplines, young generations and also adults should be educated on how critical the forest is, in case it could help in preventing deforestation status and either saving trees.
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Jun 20, 2021   #2
When the prompt was created, the writer neglected to create an introductory or preliminary paragraph that focused on deforestation. The topic chosen is not clearly explained by the reason. The prompt statement also fails to reflect the questions to be discussed based on clear responses to the outline questions. oThe prompt statement is not effective in reflecting the writer's thoughts.

For some reason, the writer saw it fit to bring forth the thesis statement as a topic statement in the 1st discussion paragraph. This created an incomplete prompt statement in the actual prompt paragraph.

The writer is also careless as there is evidence of lack of proofreading in the work. The inclusion of format coding in the paragraph proves this. There is no discussion development in the paragraphs, only listed problems. Less focus on topic presentations and more discussion or explanations are the actual requirements for the presentation.

There are more explained solutions, creating a lack of balanced discussion. This imbalance highlights the lack of writing planning and outlining prior to the actual essay drafting. In fact, it is the draft version, rather than the edited final version that Was submitted for this review.


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