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TOEFL Essay,"Planning is better for free time activities OR not"


ana_p 27 / 81  
Jul 23, 2012   #1
Hi,

Some people prefer to plan activities for their free time very carefully. Others choose not to make any plans at all for their free time. Compare the benefits of planning free-time activities with the benefits of not making plans. Which do you prefer - planning or not planning for your leisure time? Use specific reasons and examples to explain your choice.

Free time is the time which everyone likes to spend by doing their favorite activities such as, playing, watching movies and hanging out with friends. Planning plays important role to manage your activities without wasting time. Some people like to plan for their activities while others do not. Planning is not only important for our professional life but also in our personal life.

To begin with my first reason, planning helps to utilize our full time without wasting it. I like to plan my each and every activity. It helps me to finish my activities without wasting my time. It gives satisfactions that I have done it according to plan. For example, I like to spend my free time in outdoor activities such as, biking, boating, and kayaking, and many others which are close to nature. These are our weekend activities which I plan and make full use of our weekend. Planning not only saves our time but also money.

Secondly, planning helps me to make my activities more enjoyable. For example, if I want to hang out with my friends on coming weekend, I can plan by finding a correct place and time, and then ask my friends. If everyone will ready then we can enjoy it together. On the other hand, if we go without planning then we might waste our time by running here and there. This will spoil our mood. So, planning is important to make your activities more enjoyable and it will also save our energy.

Finally, it is not possible to plan our activities every time, but we can learn to manage our time by handling such situations. Therefore, I would prefer to plan my activities to save my time, energy and money.

Thanks,
Ana.
Jennyflower81 - / 690 96  
Jul 23, 2012   #2
Hi, I am happy to help with your essay :)

Free time is the time which everyone likes to spend by doing their favorite activities such as, playing, watching movies and hanging out with friends.

You could say: "Everybody enjoys having free time to spend doing their favorite activities..."

Planning plays important role to manage your activities without wasting time.
Maybe say it like this: "A person should plan ahead, in order to enjoy activities without wasting time."

Some people like to plan for their activities while others do not.
You could say: "Some people make a plan for their free time, and others tend to be spontaneous."

To begin with my first reason,One good reason for planning ahead is that it helps to utilize our full time without wasting it.

I like to plan my each and every activity.


These are ourI plan my weekend activities, which I plan andto make full use of our weekend.my free time.
OP ana_p 27 / 81  
Jul 24, 2012   #3
Thank you Jennifer..:)

Can you tel one more thing? Are these reasons strong enough to get the good marks OR Do I need to find some more strong reasons? Please tel me about the same so that I can work on it.

Thanks again.

Regards,
Ana.
Jennyflower81 - / 690 96  
Aug 5, 2012   #4
I can help some more.

If this is a comparison essay, then you ought to explain the opposite argument-- it is not good to plan your free time, because some people are more comfortable with being spontaneous. I do think you have some great reasons for your viewpoint. If you can think of any other examples, and be specific with those. (if your word limit allows)

Some things you say are vague and could be cleared up)
1) These are our weekend activities which I plan and make full use of our weekend.-- "People can get more activities and errands accomplished by planning ahead."

2) So, planning is important to make your activities more enjoyable and it will also save our energy. You repeat yourself here-- you mean to say that planning reduces stress and confusion, and that makes free time more enjoyable.

Strengthen your conclusion. You have done a great job so far :)
OP ana_p 27 / 81  
Aug 14, 2012   #5
Hi Jennifer,

Thanks for your reviews that was very helpful. And yes, this is a comparison essay, and I think, I need to consider other view also while writing such comparison essays. I will take care.

Thanks again.

Ana.
amitt - / 80  
Aug 14, 2012   #6
Jennifer,
You are a great person. I check out your posts. I admire your helping tendency. I humbly request you to adivce me to pass my forth-coming IELTS exams.


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