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"Does planning interfere with creativity?" SAT January 2009

Dawn01 19 / 33  
Jul 25, 2015   #1
Please grade my essay out of 12 and give me some feedbacks...

Prompt 1:

Planning lets people impose order on the chaotic processes of making or doing something new. Too much planning, however, can lead people to follow the same predetermined course of action, to do things the same way they were done before. Creative thinking is about breaking free from the way that things have always been. That is why it is vital for people to know the difference between good planning and too much planning.

Adapted from Twyla Tharp, The Creative Habit


Does planning interfere with creativity?
Plan and write an essay in which you develop your point of view on this issue. Support your position with reasoning and examples taken from your reading, studies, experience, or observations.

My essay:

There's a fine line separating a good planning and « too much planning ».People whose plans are accurate, concise and witty are the authors of innovative achievements and creative performances. Throughout history, scientists, successful entrepreneurs and business magnets - those who made revolutionary findings- shared this perception toward creativity.

Marie Curie , 1926 Nobel Prize laureate, was a scientist with a strict yet, flexible plans as she drowned deeply in the world of Atomic Physics. In fact, she worked in a open-air field, containing a large number of unstable chemical elements whose origin was mysterious. She planned, meticulously, to discover the secret behind the rapid change in the field's atomic structure but she can't at first describe or understand the phenomena. But, with a slice of good fortunate, she discovered that the disintegration of elements leads to the emission of radiations: Alpha, Beta, and Gamma. Finally, she gave born to a new branch of physics which is Radioactivity. The experience of Marie Curie proves that a good planning pave the way to success by generating some brilliant lucky opportunities.

Lawrence Page, the co-founder of Google, was a rigorous planner who adapts his ideas and shapes his perspective according to the circumstances. At a young age, he planned to start his own firm, with no governmental financial aid, as opposed to ordinary young entrepreneurs. He made a wide research about means to finance his new-born project. His successful creative approach came from a well-structured plan. Had he invades the world of business with neither experience nor planning, he would probably end up in jail due to bankruptcy. And, it would be no wonder like Google, the biggest research platform on the Internet.

I can make it clear, finally, that creative performances came from a wise and good planning but I must underline the fact that exaggerating can kill the project, the startup or the new-born scientific theory. So, it's critical to be aware how to vitalize smart ideas with unique and flexible plans.

lcturn87 - / 435 236  
Jul 25, 2015   #2
Hello, I can help assist you again. I will also try to read the revised version of your last essay.

1st paragraph: This is a minor mistake. "There's a fine line separating good planning and too much planning."

2nd paragraph: In the first sentence, plans should be changed to plan. You can put atomic physics in lowercase letters, Delete the comma after planned. There should be only one comma in this sentence and a correction: "...but she couldn't first describe or understand the phenomena."

The next sentence change fortunate to fortune and the comma should only be placed after fortune. Alpha, Beta, and Gamma can be in all lowercase letters. You made a good attempt with your description in the next sentence. Please state, "Finally, she discovered a new...radioactivity". Delete "a" in the next sentence. Change pave to paves. You can delete lucky.

3rd paragraph: I noticed that the missing link in your paragraphs is transitions (For example, However). For example could be placed before Marie Curie. However could be placed before Lawrence. What he accomplished occurred in the past. Your verbs should be in the past tense. Change adapts and shapes to adapted and shaped. You can simply state, "He widely researched about funding to finance his newborn project." Change invades to invaded. I think he probably would be just penniless or without money. You don't have to make any changes, this is just my opinion.

Do you mean one hit wonder?

4th paragraph: I like it when you use: "In conclusion" to end your essay. Change to:" come from wise and good planning, but..." "So it's critical to balance smart..."

This essay is an 11 because you developed your point of view but the errors prevented it from a higher score.

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