The picture shows information regarding to the process of recycling plastic bottles.In general, recycling the plastic bottles needs 2 steps that it begins at the recycling center and continues at the reclaimer.
To begin with, bottle plastic must be collected to recycle centre in order to be separated from other types of containers like glass and metal. Afterwards, the plastic bottles should be sorted by their color to exemplify the plastic bottles which have red color must be separated with other colors. For the last step in recycling process is a pressing step, those bottles have to be pressed into bales, it is approximately 7,000 bottles per bale.
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The picture shows information regarding to the process of recycling plastic bottles. In general, recycling plastic bottles needs 2 steps, that begins at the recycling center and continues at the reclaimer.
To begin with, bottle plastic must be collected to the recycling centre in order to be separated from other types of containers like glass and metal. Afterwards, the plastic bottles should be sorted by their color to exemplify their differences: the plastic bottles which have red color must be separated with other colors. The last step in the recycling process is a pressing step. Those bottles have to be pressed into bales; it is approximately 7,000 bottles per bale.
Turning to the reclaimer process, it has 5 steps. After the bottles become the bales, they should be broken by a bale chrusher in order to become plastic. Following this, the plastic is shredded into flakes that they need to be washed, rinsed and dried. As a result, the flakes are melted and put through an extruder. Finally, the flakes are formed into pellets for selling to the manufacturers. These are used to make fibers for carpets and clothing. They can also be used to make non-food containers, and other products.
Your essay is basically well-written! You need to shorten your sentences, which I did and watch your use of articles. Also needing attention is verb-conjugation.
Your use of transition phrases is good, and helps to bring a smoothness to the writing. You adequately explain in step by step fashion, the whole process, and you use language which is clear, and easy to understand. You might pick up a thesaurus, and try to find words that are similar, but have the same meaning; for example "pressing". This is used twice, and perhaps could be varied. Then the word "flakes" is used twice, which could also be looked up, and possibly replaces with a simile.
I think you used logic and narration very well, and did a good job, to start. Just some attention need to vocabulary and punctuation. Some of the longer sentences needed to be broken down with commas, and semi-colons.
Good job!
ef_carol
