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Writing Task 1: Police department's sources of funding and allocation of funds.


StarShallRise 1 / -  
Oct 30, 2022   #1

police budget 2017-2018



The provided pie charts and table show the sources and distribution of money in a particular police department in the U.K in the two years of 2017 and 2018.

Overall, an upward trend can be discerned in the budget, and Technology's share of funds increased while that of Salaries dipped.

With respect to how the police were funded, a total of 318.6 million pounds was allocated to the department in 2018, up from 304.7 million pounds the year before. In addition, the amount of money funded by National Government and other sources saw sizable increases of 10 and 2.3 million pounds respectively. In contrast, the rise in funding from local taxes was relatively minor, coming at only 0.5 million pounds.

With regard to budgetary allocation, while the percentage of money spent on Buildings and Transport remained constant at 17% from 2017 to 2018, the remainder experienced change. First, compared with 2017, spending on Technology accounted for a bigger portion of the budget in 2018 . Funds allotted for Salaries, however, dropped slightly to 69% from 75% in the same time span.

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Holt  Educational Consultant - / 13,410 4391  
Oct 30, 2022   #2
The current summary overview is confusing in terms of reference. Yes, the images were properly identified. That was good. However, the identity separation for the images, the required image titles /identifiers were missing from the presentation. As such, the summary overview became confusing due to lack of reference clarity. next time, identify which image goes with what data. Sadly, the confusion trickled down to the also confusing trending reference.

The reports themselves could use more clarity and properly formatted comparisons. Remember that there are 3 images present. This indicates the need for a 4 paragraph reporting and comparison essay. Preciseness is scored in this essay. By shortening the applicable paragraphs, the essay has less clarity and misses out on additional scoring considerations.


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