the tragic influence this "monster" has on society.
If you put "monster" in quotes, it seems like you are actually mocking the idea that he is a monster and trying to undermine it.
the
political pressure of every-day life, I think this one should be expressed differently... does not make sense...
the provoked terrorism and aggression of other countries, and the bashing on our outlook of the government. ---these are pretty clear, though.
If you are using MLA, you do not need a period before the parenthetical reference:
our control over terrorism in that region is keeping countries such as Al Queda at
bay (Jones). (also, Al Qaeda is spelled with 2 a's, and it is not a country.)
juvenile acts, such as releasing classified videos from the war--- I saw the famous video to which you are referring, and it showed unarmed civilians being gunned down. One soldier said "Light 'em up," and the other soldier started shooting the innocent civilians.
This is a very one sided argument, and it does not really offer much useful information. You should cite at least 5 articles about Wikileaks. Recent articles.
MOST importantly, you should discuss the arguments made in favor of Wikileaks' mission. Clearly, the world is divided over this issue, and many arguments are made for both sides. This is the kind of essay that MUST refute the counter-argument if it is to be persuasive.
:-)