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Population aged 65 and older


huong nguyen 1 / 1  
Jul 24, 2020   #1

the population of elderly people in three nations



The line graph compares three types of nations namely Japan, France, and Yemen in terms of the percentage of inhabitants at the age of 65 and beyond from 1960 to 2040.

As is highlighted in the line graph, there was a noticeable change in the population of the three aforementioned countries. Japan witnessed an exponential increase in the population aged 65 and older, which was marginally more popular than France. In contrast, there was a reverse trend could be seen in Yemen over the 80-year period.

At the beginning of the period, the number of aged inhabitants were highest in France, about 11% which was double than one of Japan. Over the period of 40 years, France made up the most significant proportion of the elderly, seeing it climb to 13.30%, Japan experienced the very similar figure in 2000. In the foreseeable future, Japan is also forecasted to have a fair share of senior population and predicted to reach a peak at 30% in 2040. The figures for France are projected to be less considerable, a slight rise by 8.5% over 2 decades.

Have a glance at Yemen, to begin with, there was a slight fall in the proportion of the elders over the the year, accounted for 3.70% in 1960. Yemen lose their popularity in the percentage of early citizens and hit the bottom at 2.6% in 2000. In particular, this trend is anticipated to level off, merely 3.1% at the end of the period
Bettie Orion 3 / 11  
Jul 24, 2020   #2
@huong nguyen
Don't forget to attach image to you answers.
jhhh11 14 / 30  
Jul 24, 2020   #4
Hi! I have some suggestions for you:

- "three types of nations" --> there is no "type of" countries.

- "... noticeable change in the population of the three aforementioned countries."
--> I think that this information is wrong. The only significant change occurs in Japan.

"... Japan experienced the very similar figure in 2000"

--> This is also wrong. In 2000, Japan had the highest data, not France.

You must be very careful when reporting data, or else you will receive a low score.


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