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The population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. State of Oregon


sharfina 35 / 21 5  
Jan 18, 2016   #1
The graph below shows the population change between 1940 and 2000 in three different counties in the U.S. state of Oregon.

A breakdown of the population growth engaged in three different countries of Oregon from 1940 to 2000 is illustrated in the line graph. Overall, While Washington was the favorite place for majority dwellers in Oregon, Yamhill and Columbia had fairly similar population rate. All figures shows an upward trend.

To begin, in 1940, majority people prefer to live in Washington. The population was by far the highest over the following period. 75,000 people was recorded in Washington. Yamhill and Columbia's population stood at a fairly similar level, with 30,000. By 2000, growth in number of population had seen a significant changes. Interestingly, Thus the gap between the population of three countries had widened out.While the proportion of Columbia's population had fallen back to the 1940 figure of washington, amounting for 75,000, population in Yamhill witnessed a slight increase, with 90,000.

Over the following period, all figures experienced an increase. The number of population in Washington was the highest rate, rising from over 120,000 in 1970 and reaching a high of above 240,000 in 2000. Meanwhile, the proportion of population in Columbia and Yamhill had a less marked gap, accounting for 15,000.




vangiespen - / 4,137 1449  
Jan 18, 2016   #2
There were some problems with the way that you set up the essay. These were minor problems though that just needed to be polished or connected so that the essay would become smoother to read. You have managed to use acceptable communication devices which gave the essay a slightly more professional touch. Keep on developing that aspect of your writing in order to further advance your vocabulary usage and writing skills.

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... A majority OF people prefeREDr to ... ... growth in THE number of population ... a significant changes. Interestingly, ... of three countries COUNTIES had widened out. ... figure of w Washington... slight increase, with TO 90,000.

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