guys, I wrote this essay for my term assessment. Can u guys please check for details, including the grammar, vocab, and sentence structure.
Thanks a lot
What positive steps can you or I start to take to tackle climate change?
What is the first thing that comes into your mind when you hear the word "Climate Change"? Most people will answer "global warming", the increasing of the temperature on earth's surface. This global warming will cause the climate change, which is dangerous for human being. Climate change has occurred in many places in all over the world.
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the essay contains some grammatical and structure mistakes. I highlited and corrected them but problems arouse with sending them. so, I would like to advise you to reconsider your introsuction and second paragraph
What is the first thing ... in other words, becomes worse? This will impact the environment in the world. All this stuff should be removed. It is not necessary to talk so much about what it is.
Start like this:
Rising sea levels, increasing temperature, floods and droughts are the impacts of the climate change. Humans and natures are the victims from this climate change. Sadly, this climate change occurs because of the human influences. Humans are responsible to reduce for reducing this climate change. Do not think that ...
Every second, 1 hectare of forest, which is equivalent to 2 US football fields, is cut down. This means...
If necessary, they can go traveling by cycling or public transport. Some people might feel uncomfortable if they travel by public transport. These people they can use hybrid cars, which is are very eco-friendly cars, or they can use ...
The third thing that people should do in order to reduce the climate change is to reduce the use of electricity. Electricity is ...
This is a good essay!! You made a few mistakes, but the structure is very good.
what positive steps can you or I start to tackle climate change?
Ice caps disappearing, rising sea levels, increased amount of natural disasters are impacts of climate change. Humans and Nature are the victims of climate change, yet sadly, humans are guilty of this crime. Do you know? Every second, 1 hectare of forest, which is equivalent to 2 US football fields, is cut down.
There are many ways to tackle climate change such as saving resources by installing alternative energy like solar panels and windmills, changing to compact florescent bulbs and taking a shower instead of a bath. Other ways include travelling efficiently by using public transportation instead of a car and also, planting trees.
The 3Rs, reduce, reuse and recycle are the most common terms used when someone starts the topic on "Tackling Climate Change." Despite these terms, there is actually another step we can do which can tackle climate change so much more effectively then using the 3Rs alone. The magic step that could have reduced climate change mitigation by 81% was actually the step that was ignored by people around the world. This step could also reduce 51% of the global greenhouse gas emissions that had led to global warming. This magic step, which most people ignored was actually "going vegetarian."
Yes, indeed this step sounds weird, but it is actually a simple but powerful step to tackle climate change. Going vegetarian would reduce livestock raising which drives 1/3 of the world's deforestation. It uses up 3.4billion hectares of land for animal grazing and for growing crops to feed the animals. Not only that, 1kg of meat actually caused emissions equivalent of 36.4kg of carbon dioxide! Livestock industry had indeed produced more carbon dioxide than all the world's cars, trains and planes combined.
Have you heard of the saying "An apple a day, keeps the doctor away"? Leading health experts agree that going vegetarian is the single best thing that we can do for ourselves and our families. Not only does going vegetarian help in tackling climate change, it benefits us by increasing our life expectancy by up to 15 years, lowering our blood pressure and cholesterol levels, preventing stoke conditions and many more! Also, going vegetarian can prevent countless of diseases and illness ranging from the swine flu (H1N1) to cancer!
" Be Veg. Go Green. Save our Planet. "
Note: Sorry I kinda copy a part of it from the previous essay. :P
