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Possible ways to encourage the use of public transport to reduce traffic - IELTS


kurianjoseph1 8 / 18 7  
Feb 20, 2013   #1
The rising levels of congestion and air pollution found in most of the world's cities can be attributed directly to the rapidly increasing number of private cars in use. In order to reverse this decline in the quality of life in cities, attempts must be made to encourage people to use their cars less and public transport more.Discuss possible ways to encourage the use of public transport.

With globalisation and modern technology encroaching on every corner of the world, it is a well known fact that air pollution and congestion is increasing at an alarming pace. Among the suggestions on how to tackle this problem is encouraging the use of public transportation. This essay will analyse the strategies to encourage public to use trains and buses to commute to work.

To begin with, it is felt that one way to stimulate the use of public transportation is making the use of private cars expensive. For instance, tolls have been introduced successfully in various parts of cities around the world. This example, clearly illustrates the fact that use of private cars on highways are expensive as compared to using the public transportation. Thus, introducing tolls and other taxes on using private car is a good strategy to deter the use people from using private vehicles.

In addition to this, limiting the number of parking permits in urban areas help to dissuade people from using their private vehicles. Take Sydney Metro for instance. Last year, studies revealed that the city experienced sudden decrease in traffic due to 30% hike in price for the parking permits. This clearly illustrate the fact that, increase in price made it inconvenient for the people to use their private cars to travel to cities. Therefore, a price increase in parking permits is a good way to curb the congestion and encourage using public transportation

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Following the look, it is clear that by increasing the cost of using the private vehicle is an effective strategy to encourage people using public transportation. Thus, this will help to lessen congestion and air pollution to a certain extent.

william731 18 / 43 13  
Feb 20, 2013   #2
This example, clearly illustrates the fact that use of private cars on highways are expensive as compared to using the public transportation

I think comma is not needed in here.

ntroducing tolls and other taxes on using private car is a good strategy to deter the use people from using private vehicles

it is clear that by increasing the cost of using the private vehicles is an effective strategy to encourage people using public transportation
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Feb 20, 2013   #3
air pollution and congestion isare increasing

.... two things - air pollution + congestion
My suggestion;
.... it is quite obvious that air pollution and traffic congestion increase at an alarming pace.

This example (no comma) clearly illustrates the fact that use of private cars on highways are expensive as compared to using the public transportation.

.... this has no grammar issue, but it is a bit odd as an idea. This is what I suggest;
Such efforts have discouraged people using their private cars on highways due to the high cost they incur compared to much less expensive public transportation.

You display excellent writing skills... Good Luck!
joythblessy 86 / 272 15  
Feb 20, 2013   #4
Hai kurian..

Good essay.. Nice to read..good vocabularies too..

Additional points.

:Encourage public transport system,
:Cheap, on time, reliable public transportations,
:Fee parking or reduction in parking for those who use public transport system such as trains.
:Public education through curriculum and Medias about disadv of personal vehicles.

Tessy
OP kurianjoseph1 8 / 18 7  
Feb 24, 2013   #5
thanks Dumi, William and Tessy :)


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