Please grade my SAT Essay out of 12:
Assignment:
Which is a more powerful force of social change: Power of patience?
Essay:
It's totally human to fight for one's right no matter how. Some people tend to use power that lead to war, anger and foolishness others use wisdom and patience, a pursuit that make people go willingly rather then giving up with force.
One compelling illustration that patience is a more powerful force of social change is demonstrated in the Civil Rights movement. In 1955, Rosa Parks refused to give up her seat for a white man on the bus when the driver asked her to do so. Although she was arrested and jailed, her bravery inspired the Montgomery Bus Boycott that lasted for over a year. During the boycott, black people refused to use the public bus as a non-violent protest against the discrimination in America. Martin Luther King was also influenced by her action and became one of the most inspirational figures during the movement. He arranged hundreds of non-violence protests and even gave an unforgettable speech entitled "I have a Dream". And because of all these long lasting peaceful protests, their patience finally paid off and the Civil Rights Act of 1964 was finally passed, which officially ended the discrimination against ethics, race, religion, etc. in America.
In India, also, patience has the final say in independence conflict. In fact, Mahatma Gandhi the leader of Indian struggle against Briton's occupation is mostly known by his tolerant pursuit to detain freedom marked by patience and wisdom. By pushing his nation into social movement to express in tolerant and peaceful way, he saw the grains of union among people. He believes that by resisting with wisdom and patience and no matter how violin fly oppressed he can reach high scale thinking and since with is strong then power and violence, so that patience will defeat barbarity. Enhancing these values, as patience is, so, more effective tool to change society rather than bloody, filthy and powerful ways.
An example that proves that power is not a force of reform is the battle of the kingdom of Israel. Around 500 years B.C, Philistines were in a huge political and military conflict with Israeli which led to on-the ground battle. These two armies were separated by a deep valley and as no army dare to go down, the status stabilize the tension and create a situation of no-war and no-peace. Although, Goliath, a huge fighter armed with heavy shield, go down the valley and call Israeli to send their strongest fighter to challenge him so that the winner will win the war and takeover the land. But, since he was big and strong, no Israeli dare to fight him, expect David, the little Shepherd boy, who go to the battle field armed with a stick, 4 stones picked patiently from the brook and a sling. When David decided to fight neither Israeli nor Goliath expected that he will resist. Goliath undermines him and say:" Am I a dog that you came to me with a stick". In fact, Goliath thinks that his power will lead him to an easy massive victory but David remained patient and morally strong as Goliath cannot see. The little shepherd boy , experienced in protecting his cattle from wolves and wild beasts, takes brook's stone and throw it with the sling. Despite being small, the stone has a huge momentum with a velocity of 100 miles/hour .When hitting Goliath's head , Goliath fall immediately. David was glad , he couldn't believe himself that a little patient kid can beat huge and powerful fighter. In word, patience is the most powerful arm to social change when facing a Leviathan.
Another example that emphasize on the shortage of power is the movie "Avatar". In the movie, humans went to another planet called Pandora and tried to take over the home of the natives by destroying everything there. Although the natives did not have advanced technologies and weapons like the humans do, they were outrageous after they lost their families and home to the humans. As a result, they unite together and fought against the humans using the geography and the animals to their advantage. At the end of the movie, the humans were defeated and were forced to go back to Earth. This example clearly shows that power cannot bring social changes to society because people, as debilitate as they might seem to be, will eventually rise up and fight back and the whole dictatorship will collapses.
In a conclusion, historic and literary examples show how effective patience is to solve the problems and to bring social change contradictory to power that lead only to warfare and violence, a pursuit that run against human nature as a wise creature.
As for Goliath's story.The story is presented bible,Tor'ah and Qu'ran how can it be unfamiliar? so Jewish, Christian and muslims know this story. I don't understand why it's not familiar with modern people.
Please any other Grades !!! thanks !!
Hi, well that's just it. Religion is a very explosive thing to discuss as every religion has a specific version of the story. The reason why I thought that discussing a more modern story is because not everyone these days are raised in a religious setting so they may not be familiar with the story. However, everyone is familiar with current events and such events do not cause major religious discussions. It is alright if you want to keep the David and Goliath story. Mine was only a suggestion. You don't have to change it if you don't want to :-) No problem.
