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IELTS- SHOULD PRACTICAL SKILLS BE TAUGHT AT SCHOOL?


callmedumbazz 3 / 4  
Jul 30, 2011   #1
Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management along with the academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that the skills which help to deal with everyday problems are always useful. However, not many practical skills can be taught to school children along with knowledge from text books. I would disagree that schools should teach skills like bank account management or car maintenance.

Nowadays, we live in a knowledge-based economy in which independent thinking and problem solving are the most important skills. This is therefore, theoretical materials are emphasized and academic subjects such as mathematics, science and languages are taught in classes. Moreover, with timetables are already full, schools do not have time left to teach children anything else. Besides, young minds should not be overloaded with extra lessons at school to learn practical skills. If the students do not even have some free time just to relax, they might not be able to concentrate on their studies, and as a result, fail the academic subjects.

In addition to the argument against teaching practical skills at schools, it is believed that the skills like bank account management and car maintenance are not really necessary for young children to learn. This is because most adults can manage their finances well without being taught accounting lessons at school. The simple skills like opening a bank account can be easily learnt when we grow up. Likewise, car maintenance lessons are not really needed because it would be easier for most people to take their cars to a qualified mechanic.

In conclusion, schools are already doing a good job teaching traditional academic subjects. For the reasons mentioned above, if they start teaching many practical skills, the study of important academic subjects will suffer.

Hi I will be grateful if anyone can tell me whether I have a clear thesis sentence, good vocabulary uses and a right structure. thanks guys

OP callmedumbazz 3 / 4  
Jul 30, 2011   #2
Hi guys, I have added one sentence at the end of paragraph 2 and 3. Do you think they make the argument stronger? Are they necessary to make a solid argument structure? Thanks

It is true that children should be taught some skills that can help them dealing with everyday problems along with knowledge from text books. However, not many practical skills can be taught to school children and I would disagree that schools should teach skills like bank account management or car maintenance.

Nowadays, we live in a knowledge-based economy in which independent thinking and problem solving are the most important skills. This is therefore, theoretical materials are emphasized and academic subjects such as mathematics, science and languages are taught in classes. Moreover, with timetables are already full, schools do not have time left to teach children anything else. Besides, young minds should not be overloaded with extra lessons at school to learn practical skills. If the students do not even have some free time just to relax, they might not be able to concentrate on their studies, and as a result, fail the academic subjects. Thus, the idea that practical skills should be taught to school children will not garner strong support.

In addition to the argument against teaching bank account management and car maintenance at schools, it is believed that these skills are not really necessary for young children to learn. This is because most adults can manage their finances well without being taught accounting lessons at school. The simple skills like opening a bank account can be easily learnt when we grow up. Likewise, car maintenance lessons are not really needed because it would be easier for most people to take their cars to a qualified mechanic. Therefore, it is easy to see why many would argue against the need of teaching these practical skills at school.

In conclusion, schools are already doing a good job teaching traditional academic subjects. For the reasons mentioned above, if they start teaching many practical skills, the study of important academic subjects will suffer.
ekekek 25 / 51  
Jul 30, 2011   #3
For me, I think it will make the essay inflexible if you add up a summary in the end of each para..

Your writing skills are pretty well, but I didn't understand:

If the students do not even have some free time just to relax, they might not be able to concentrate on their studies, and as a result, fail the academic subjects.

practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management

Do you think cultivate pratical skills equral to enough time to relax?

In conclusion, schools are already doing a good job in teaching traditional academic subjects.
Fiasdo - / 1  
Jul 30, 2011   #4
Moreover, with timetables are already full...

This sentence, it seems to me, has a little problem. "Moreover, since timetables are already full" might be better.


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