Some people prefer to engage in
have a job with a lower payment in order to save time for their vacations. Others, However, Stay in a different ground. As I am concerned (this expression is usually used in speaking. ) , I would like to involve in a well-paid job with a higher salary rather than a job with less responsibilities and shorter workworking hours. I am going to support my choice in the following paragraphs.
Open the introduction with a motivator and then write the thesis statement. Try to write the reasons (Several words) why you took this position at the end of the introduction instead of the statement " I am going to support my choice in the following paragraphs".
afford full expenses of the life (the term "living costs" is a better choice in this context)u used the words "expense" and "afford" for several times. Try to use synonym.
cost of house rentalrental cost of a house is very high
Even though you to choose to live in a small apartment you have to pay a lot for it
---> What do you mean? Revise the sentence
Do not use contractions in writing
a higher quality hubbies.
----> "hobbies" is a plural word and you cannot use it with "a".