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Toefl essay-I prefer the movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain.

loveoaple 1 / 3  
Sep 2, 2011   #1
I'm freshman, ^^ thanks for your kindly help!!!

Topic: Some movies are serious, designed to make the audience think. Other movies are designed primarily to amuse and entertain. Which type of movie do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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There are many types of movies: comedy, drama, horror, suspense or thriller, action, fantasy, crime, romance, science fiction, documentary, family, mysterious, etc. In my opinion, every type of movies has its specific function. For instance, the comedy can make you laugh and greatly release your pressure; the conflict and intense character development in drama provoke audience to think; the science fiction movies always deepen people's understanding to the risk of the exploration or high-technology and sometimes enlighten invention. Even the horror films which many persons consider are nothing but scare and frighten people have their own value, such as telling people to be brave and kind-hearted or some non-mainstream perspectives.

Thus, it is hard to decide which type of movies you prefer. It is depended on your current mood and situation. Recently, movies designed primarily to amuse and entertain suit me because I am feeling a tremendous amount of pressure this week, like the air around me slightly constricting. Since three months ago I graduated from university and entered the job market, there had been something incompatible between me and working environment. I experience a completely different world from the school campus, more competition and stress, less praise and encouragement. Besides, you also need to deal with the intricate relationships with customers, colleagues, team leader and many strangers, which is a new networking art I have much to learn. All in all, I eager to absorb the nutrition from the relaxing movies and refuel. The entertainment and amusement in them like a wind sweep away the depressed mood and bring a breath of fresh air to me.

Specifically speaking, I love Mr. Bean series so much. It is a British comedy television series of 14 half-hour episodes written by and starring Rowan Atkinson as the title character. Based on a character originally developed by Atkinson at university, the series follows the exploits of Mr. Bean, described by Atkinson as "a child in a grown man's body", in solving various problems presented by everyday tasks and often causing disruption in the process. Bean rarely speaks, and the largely physical humor of the series is derived from his interactions with other people and his unusual solutions to situations. I can hardly stop laughing when watching them and forget all the unpleasant things. It is really a help to adjust my mood. The fantastic idea of Mr. Bean is amazing.

abc1400 17 / 32  
Sep 2, 2011   #2
In my view, it is enough to mention 2 or 3 types of movie because your essay topic is not about consider different movie types. Second, do not use etc in academic formal writing use such as .
OP loveoaple 1 / 3  
Sep 2, 2011   #3

Thank you for your suggestions and comments! Next time, I will pay more attention to them.
basawang 10 / 76  
Sep 8, 2011   #4
Dear loveoaple,

First, you should state your central ideas (I prefer comedies, which are designed primarily to amuse and entertain) in the first paragraph. It is important to give your readers a general idea in the introduction.

Second, you should summarize your point in the last paragraph, not give a specific example in the end. I believe it is more suitable to mention Mr. Bean series in the second paragraph. Perhaps you can add a new paragraph to elaborate this further.
winchesters 3 / 9  
Sep 8, 2011   #5
it is depended....it depends
which type of movies...which type of movie
no need to write A before tremendous
don't start a paragraph with thus except ending.

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