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Which do you prefer ? To study alone or To study with a group of students?


Yorgun95 3 / 4  
Jul 28, 2013   #1
Some students prefer to study alone. Others prefer to study with a
group of students. Which do you prefer? Use specific reasons and
examples to support your answer.
I agree with the idea of studying alone,because there are so many advantages of studying solo,first of all when studying alone you have the oppurtunity to put aside enough time to revise your project,In addition i don't think that there's something better than study in a peaceful place where no one can disturb you.Whats more it helps you get better results.studying in a peaceful place helps you build your skills.The students who prefer to study with a group of students generally afraid of making mistakes,i have learnt from my mistakes that in order to succeed your desire for success should be greater than you fear the failure.What's more when studying alone you also get the oppurtunity to finish your homeworks or projects on time.When it comes to the idea of studying with a group of students,you don't get any of these oppurtunities.Because everyone comes up with different ideas which can get you confused,also make a lot of noise that may cause distractibility.To sum up i prefer to study alone to help me improve my skills and focus more.

sanginabadi 2 / 6 3  
Jul 28, 2013   #2
Hi
In my view, your essay is good, but if you want to get a good grade, you must write in a format that ETS prefer it.

First, it is better to write 4 or 5 paragraphs.
Second, word count is important. According to Joseph Miranda if you write 450-500 words, your score probably is around 27-30, if you write 350-450 words, your score probably will be around 22-26, and if you write 250-350 words, your score probably will be around 17-21.

Third, you must use a standard format. The first paragraph is introduction, the second, third, and forth are the body paragraphs, and the last is the conclusion. It is better to start the body paragraphs and the conclusion as follow:

Firstly,
Secondly,
Thirdly,
In conclusion,
OP Yorgun95 3 / 4  
Jul 28, 2013   #3
Thank you for taking your time to read it
hereafter i'll try to use Firstly,
Secondly,
Thirdly,
In conclusion,but i don't know what else i can write i mean nothing comes to my mind
sanginabadi 2 / 6 3  
Jul 28, 2013   #4
There are lots of topic lists in the following book. I'm sure you have visited them already 
Try to write an outline for any of these topics.
If you don't know how to write an outline, I suggest you to download some videos from YouTube.
There are some good videos by Joseph Miranda and Tie Keino on Youtube. I'm sure these videos help not only to writing an outline, but to help for all necessary skills that you need to take Toefl ibt test.
sanginabadi 2 / 6 3  
Jul 28, 2013   #5
I'm sorry I forgot to write the name of the book.
There are lots of topic lists in the following book. I'm sure you have visited them already 
The official guide to the toefl ibt, pp: 216-230.
Try to write an outline for any of these topics.
If you don't know how to write an outline, I suggest you to download some videos from YouTube.
There are some good videos by Joseph Miranda and Tie Keino on Youtube. I'm sure these videos help not only to writing an outline, but to help for all necessary skills that you need to take Toefl ibt test.
dumi 1 / 6,948 1592  
Jul 28, 2013   #6
.... this is good advice.
Yes, you need to follow a more organized structure for your essay. I have advised you in one of your previous essays as to how it should be. Hope you'll post this essay again in the right form of structure.
gmad06 20 / 151 55  
Jul 28, 2013   #7
In conclusion,but i don't know what else i can write i mean nothing comes to my mind

I totally disagree with you on this. I was able to pick two strong ideas from the essay you wrote.
They are "time flexibility" and "less distraction". Since you strongly agree with studying alone, you don't have to
talk about the reasons why others prefer to study with a group. Develop a strong sentence from those main ideas,
expand / support it, and give relevant examples to make your essay longer. You only need a minimum of two ideas
for this type of essay.

hope this helps....
Pahan 1 / 1,932 553  
Aug 4, 2013   #8
You need to pay serious attention to essays structure. Follow what dumi suggests. A few other mistakes I found;

studying solo

self studying

first of all when studying alone you have the opportunity to put aside enough time to revise your project

... good reason -
yep... seems you have good points, but you need to work on the structure a lot


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