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Task2: In the present time in some nations, ownership of a house is more important than renting

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May 15, 2021   #1

In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people

In the present time in some nations, ownership of a house is more important than renting. My from of view, I reckon this comment above is a negative case to notions discussed further in this essay.

Firstly, purchasing a home in some countries is extremely expensive resulted not suitable for a good number of people. Most of the well-paid, promising jobs or manual work have been located in cities, center industry especially in massive cities. In addition, those places are plenty of people who live in surrounding countryside move up cities finding suitable themselves work. Besides, inhabitation needs daily activities after working time, nevertheless, purchasing a home in big cities is difficult for the poor and under the middle class Because it requires a large amount of money. Instead renting the house is flexible and more convenient. Rental house fees are impossible with an underpaid and to pay for some filed such as take care of a family or advanced heath. For example, Singapore is a part of countries in Southeast Asia that is the most expensive about the standard of life. furthermore, the house produces which move up tens of thousands dollar.

Secondly, a large amount of money is used to buy a home that can divide into many parts to service for several different goals. Each person in the community has their dreams or targets. Using all of your money buying a house that could make people give up passion. For instance, some young generations have some hope for going study abroad or traveling on the world with way use a part of savings and the rest for accommodation. Sharing the money into sections allows people to no spin out of control in life. In addition, decreasing under pressure for the problem has to have a house.

All things considered, be the owner of the accommodation could not probably be suitable for many people, especially in low class in society. Next, the cost for purchasing a house is massively and divided the money into paying for some different things such as hobbies or heath
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May 16, 2021   #2
The prompt restatement is lacking. Where is the reasoning sentence? That would be a response to the question, " Why might that be the case?" Without it, your opinion does not have a solid and related discussion foundation. Always double check the restatement against the original. Make sure all aspects are covered. Otherwise, your TA is incomplete and will receive a lester scoring percentage.

Kindly pay better attention to your sentence presentations and idea/reasoning clarity. The problems are mostly caused by the word formation of the presentations. There are also the time reference errorS that added to the problem. The reference is to a continuing problem so it should use active present tense. Buy to perform more sentence building exercises prior to your next essay task. Make sure that you can forum simple sentences properly and clearly. Perfect that first then moveon to complex writing sentence writing exercises. Proper sentence presentations are vital to passing these exams.

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