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Preserving its old, historic buildings means respecting the previous generations


Ehmet 1 / 1  
Jul 22, 2010   #1
When it comes to choose preserve or destroy the old historic buildings, I believe that different people will hold different perspective to this question. In my point of view, a city should preserve the old historic buildings. Being a container of human activity, Building, obviously, is also a reservoir of human history and culture. To some extent, preserving old historic building means respecting the previous generations.

The first and most important thing is that we need to preserve our history, it is a commonsense. But the problem is How to preserve it? just write it in the book? Of course not. Every building has its own historical background, especially the old historic buildings from which we can know specifically something about the previous period of history. For example, if the buildings of Ancient Rome have not been preserved till now, how can we know about Ancient Rome's history precisely?

Furthermore, the old historic buildings of a city would accentuate a city's culture and characteristic. The Kashgar city is the best example, although a new modern city have been built near to the old one, the most attractive place of Kashgar is still the old city, which has many old historic buildings. The people who want to know about Uyghur culture, one of main culture of Central Asia, always go to visit the old Kashgar city.

Finally, preserving old historic building means respecting the previous generations. Maybe some old buildings have negative effect on the cityscape or its function, however, with the consideration of respect previous people, we have no right to destroy or substitute them for modern buildings. On the other hand, we have the responsibility of preserving them to our next generations so that they could have the opportunity to know about their predecessors tangibly.

In conclusion, the importance of maintaining the historic buildings of a city could outweigh the value of replacing them with modern buildings because of the reasons above.
nguyenhathu178 2 / 5  
Jul 22, 2010   #2
That is an interesting essay in my opinion. however, something may be change to make the essay better

1.In 2nd passage.
-the sentence " But the problem is How to preserve it? just write it in the book? Of course not" is probably far from the topic. This causes the passage lacking coherence.

- Every building has its own historical background, especially the old historic buildings from which we can know specifically something about the previous period of history

=>Every building has its own historical background, especially the old historic buildings that help us to know more about the previous period of history.

2.In 4th passage . "responsibility for" instead of "responsibility of".
- On the other hand, we have the responsibility of preserving them to our next generations so that they could have the opportunity to know about their predecessors tangibly.

- On the other hand, keeping the old historic building is the act bringing more opportunity for our next generations to know about their predecessors tangibly.

-In conclusion, the importance of maintaining the historic buildings of a city could outweigh the value of replacing them with modern buildings because of the reasons above.

=>In conclusion, the importance of maintaining the historic buildings of a city could outweigh the value of replacing them with modern buildings. That is the reason why we should preserve instead of replace them.
OP Ehmet 1 / 1  
Jul 22, 2010   #3
nguyenhathu178
nguyenhathu, thank you for your help.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 25, 2010   #4
Hello, I'm sorry it took me so long to see your essay. Usually you would have goten more responses by now.

When it comes to choosing whether to preserve or destroy the old historic buildings, I believe that different people will hold have different perspectives on...

The first and most important...
... the buildings of Ancient Rome had not been preserved until now, how could we know about Ancient Rome's history precisely? (add a sentence to support your thesis, like this: The fact that preserving buildings helps to preserve culture supports the argument that we should preserve buildings as a matter of respect for our ancestors.)

Then do the next paragraph:
Furthermore, the old historic buildings of a city would accentuate...

If you end the first paragraph with the statement about "respect," it is good to end some of the body paragraphs with sentences that show how the paragraph supports that thesis statement at the end of the first paragraph.

:-)
annmichelle7 2 / 5  
Jul 26, 2010   #5
That is an interesting topic.
But I think that a city should preserve its old, historic buildings. Since those buildings are the root and start of all modern buildings we have right now. Those buildings were the standard of building more complex and modeled buildings. We should keep something old and unique in our city, those buildings are a big piece of a city.


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