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Time passes brutally while you are struggling with daily issues and trying hard at work. Young people live the world as it will never end and postpone many pleasures to a later date. Since the age is getting older and you are getting closer to grave, you understand better. Everything matters in life, all you need to enjoy life without unnecessary worries. The older people experienced clearly that the only thing worth to worry is the passing time. They best know how to have joy since the moment is priceless.
Many young can surprise by the scene of the old lady who spends hours at the park just sitting and watching outside.From a young person point of view this scene can be considered as a waste of time but the truth is the opposite. Those are the times she can realize how amazing the world is, admiring the nature itself. Those are the times she is feeling the wind on her face, having the most joyful times of feeling she lives. Many young fail to realize the surrounding beauty. Young tend to behave in a destructive way rather than enjoying it.
Even though the older people are no more so energetic as the young are, they are fresh in mind since there is no need to concern about anything:the children have already grown up and they have enough earning for assurance. They might treat as selfish in other words but live the moment as its all theirs. Forgetting all responsibilities, no matter what life is here not to worry but for them to enjoy.
Life serves us much, but people need time to understand how wonderful just living is. The older do enjoy every breathe they take rather than the young do.