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IELTS Task 2: Printed newspaper vs Online newspaper. What will be more important?

PaulthePhoenix 4 / 16  
Aug 3, 2018   #1

Internet or printed news?

Some people think that in the future, printed newspaper will still be the most important source of news. However, others think that news provided on the Internet will play the most important role. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

These days, opinions differ as to whether Internet or printed news will be the most crucial source of news. Some people believe printed format will retain its significance, while others think it will gradually be replaced by online news. From my standpoint, I tend to agree with the latter.

It is understandable why people believe in the importance of printed format. The publishing industry has existed for hundreds of years employing millions of personnels all around the world. It is often depicted as "too big to fall" as the failure of such may leave some detrimental effects on any national economy. Besides, reading daily newspaper has so long been established as a die-hard habit for some. Such people adhere to the traditional form of news as they gain the distinctive joice flipping through the pages.

However, I strongly believe it's the online news that makes the future of journalism. The speed of Internet is undeniably faster than ever before, facilitating live-stream coverage of sport events and music concerts. Moreover, the online multimedia platform equips journalists with ample ways to report news such as: infographics, animated videos or interactive discussion. Those creative methods can never be feasible on a printed format. Another reason to reinforce to the growth of online news is our over-reliant on the Internet. It is not an exxageration to say that we have been so inexorably linked to the Internet that it is hard to live without it. Online articles, news that spread through various platform of the Internet, will surely benefit from this trend.

In conclusion, although there are evidences to suggest traditional newspaper is still favoured, I strongly believe online format will be the most important source of news in the future.

theblacktea 1 / 2 2  
Aug 3, 2018   #2
Hi Paul, here is my comment:
1. ... to whether the Internet.
2. ... believe the printed format
3. ... reading daily newspaper => a daily newspaper/ daily newspapers
4. ... of the Internet
5. ... can never be feasible on in
6. ... not an exaggeration

Overall, I think this is a nice piece of writing with a good flow of ideas. However, there are still some minor mistakes about the article.
Holt [Contributor] - / 8,598 2499  
Aug 4, 2018   #3
Phuong, your response automatically failed the Task Accuracy considerations. That means your essay is not properly addressing the prompt discussion requirements. What are the requirements for this discussion? Let's have a look shall we?

Discussion Instruction: Discuss both views and give your opinions.
Response Action: I tend to agree with the latter.

Why are you agreeing with an opinion when the instruction is asking you to do a comparison discussion with a personal point of view presentation? This is an error in judgement on your part which will easily result in a failing score because your TA does not respond to the task you are given. This is an essay that is approached in the following format:

1. Opening paraphrase - You did a good job with this part. Acceptable sentence structure and a clear representation of the discussion topic helped to make that presentation worthy if an average score. However, the wrong discussion instruction restatement was so severe that it created a prompt deviation that would lead to a failing score overall in the actual test.

2. Public POV 1 - Not represented
3. Public POV 2 - Not represented
4. Personal POV - Represented but with a different response than what is expected.

For your response sentence, all you had to say was; "I shall offer an analysis of the 2 public points of view in a comparison manner and then discuss my opinion regarding the same topic."

The mistake you made is precisely why an exam taker is advised to not offer a clear opinion or response in the prompt paraphrase. It would have been better to simply restate the original prompt based on the actual presentation and then saved the discussion points for the 3 body paragraphs. That way, you would have had an opportunity to double check whether your response is correct or not.

Here is an important piece of advice. As you write your essay, always refer back to the discussion instructions of the original prompt. Check off the required discussion points to be sure that you have represented the required discussion paragraphs and, most importantly, that you are still discussing the essay based on the original requirements. Students who fail to double check the prompt against their essay draft more often than not make the same mistake that you made in the discussion of this essay.

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