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Private car ownership has grown dramatically in recent years.


saruul2004 2 / 4  
Mar 2, 2010   #1
Private car ownership has grown dramatically in recent years. This has led to a rise in traffic congestion.
What could governments and individuals do to reduce congestion?
Give reasons for you answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no doubt that nowadays there are too many private cars on the roads in the biggest cities in the world compired with, for example, thirty years ago. It is true that this is a major factor which brings the roads more traffic congestions or jams. In my opinion, the governments and individuals should do some effecient changes to decrease congestion. In the following paragraphs, I will give some my suggestions to our government and individuals what they have to include on laws or policies to decrease traffic congestion .

First of all, The government should get more tax on the importing vehicles and have a limitation of the numbers of cars which are impotes per month or year. I think that it will reflect the numbers of cars greatly. Moreover, more people are likely to buy second-hand cars because of cheap prices. For instances, in my country, we have not yet any car factors but almost everyone has his or her own car because some local companies import and sell second-hand cars cheap. Sometimes, there are car accidents which are related to engines happen and stop suddently in the center of roads. So, the government should also pay more attention to this issue.

Secondly, we can not reproach for only the number of cars in the cities. The government should pay attention to public transports such as how is convenient and how is about service and how is cheap. These are also become a effect of why people prefer their own cars to travel. So, in my opinion, the intensive developmenting for public transport is the best way that to reduce traffic congestion. Personally, in my country, it is difficult to catch a bus and we have to wait a long time even in winter. So, people living in my country are likely to choose another kind of transport such as their own cars.

Thirdly, car accidents which are related to people or cars affect to traffic congestion and jams too. People must follow the traffic rule. If people attend to traffic more gentle, I think, there will be have a drop in the traffic congestion. So, the law and policy related with roads should be analyzed by the government again.

To sum it up, in my opinion, the we have to investigate carefully what factor affects to this issue most. Then the we have to work on it.

OP saruul2004 2 / 4  
Mar 2, 2010   #2
Hello all,

I know there are many grammatical mistakes in my essay.
If it is possible for you, can you correct them?

Saruul2004
cathyliu 19 / 54  
Mar 2, 2010   #3
There is no doubt that nowadays there are too many private cars on the roads in the biggest cities in the world compired with, for example, thirty years ago.

It is no doubt that nowadays there are...
or
There is no doubt that nowadays more and more private cars appear on the roads ....

You essay is great!
OP saruul2004 2 / 4  
Mar 2, 2010   #4
Thank you for correcting my essay's introduction, Cathyliu.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,339 129  
Mar 3, 2010   #5
The first paragraph is great! I'll just change a little:

...suggestions to our government and individuals about what they have to include in laws or policies to decrease traffic congestion .

...the number of cars which are imported per month or year. I think that it will reduce the number of cars greatly. Moreover, more people are likely to buy second-hand cars because of cheap prices. For instance , in my country, we have not yet any car factors but almost everyone has his or her own car because some local companies import and sell second-hand cars cheap. Sometimes, there are car accidents which are related to engines happen and stop suddenly in the center of roads.

Good point!! This is a strong argument.

:-)
vikasp 2 / 8  
Mar 16, 2010   #6
you have great ideas but weak grammar. I think you should practice little more...
government should get charge more tax on the importing vehicles and set a limitation of the numbers of cars which are imported per month or year....

how is convenient and how is about service and how is cheaphow convinent and efficient it is and can people easily afford it .... So, in my opinion, the intensive developmentingdevelopment for public transport is the best way that to reduce traffic congestion.
cathyliu 19 / 54  
Mar 18, 2010   #7
There is no doubt that nowadays there are too many private cars on the roads in the biggest cities in the world compired with, for example, thirty years ago.

There are two small points :
(1) two "there be " sentence patterns

It is no doubt that nowadays ----
or
It/There is no doubt that more private cars run on roads of relatively developed cities nowadays comparied with that of, for example, thirty years ago.

(2) as you have used comparison, I think it is better to use "more" instead of "too many" .
By the way, compare


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