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Problems associated with sea levels and the possible solution


Cachaaaaaaaa 28 / 38 3  
Oct 23, 2016   #1
Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions

People around the world had been so familiar with the global warming phenomenon and how the sea levels had reached the alarming rates. The flood that is inundated the coastal area is the problem caused by the increasing sea levels and the workable solution to tackle this threat is constructing the flood barriers.

The watery catastrophe had been the acute problem faced by many people. Inundation is the effect of global warming that melts the glossaries and ice caps in Greenland and Antarctica, hence it increases the sea levels and flood is the big impact of it. The devastation of flood forces the people who life in the coastal areas relocating their habitats and surely will cause the poverty of the people. It is shown that the increase of ocean levels that cause flood will bring a dangerous impact for the coastal inhabitants.

The workable solution to prevent the inundation by sea levels is building flood barriers such as floodgates, dams and dikes. It can be constructed along of the coastal areas, thus helps the flood does not reach the inhabitant since the waterways are limited to reach the population areas. This solution had been implemented by Netherland for a long time ago and it totally works to prevent the tidal waves from floodwaters.

To conclude, the retaining construction is such a useful solutions to block the waterways pushing the population area hence the flood caused by the increase ocean levels that becomes the most frighten threat can be prevented.
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Oct 24, 2016   #2
Hi Russel. Well, this certainly looks like it would score another 6 in an actual exam. You have proven to have an ability to properly understand the prompt. The method by which you present your opinion and discussion has a semblance of organization and it is evident that you did your best to outline the topics for discussion prior to writing the essay. As such, your essay has a fluid flow of thought. The only clear problem with your essay is that you sometimes use the wrong word when describing something you want to share. For example, in the following sentence, " Inundation is the effect of global warming", while inundation is the aftermath of a flood, the proper term to have used would have been "Flooding". I understand that you want to impress the reviewer by using more complex vocabulary. However, you have to study or have the ability to realize when to use certain terms and if the term is applicable to a certain meaning that you want to relay. This is not a bad effort. In fact, it is an impressive effort on your part. I am looking forward to seeing your further improvement in the coming days.
dinartika19 37 / 67 6  
Oct 26, 2016   #3
Hi Caca!

I think it is better for you to state what is your solution in your overview in the first paragraph.

Because the question ask about problems and solutions, you should give ideas more than one for both of them. You can write it in the second and third paragraph.

As for the examples, please at least give one example related to the idea which can help you to boost your score.

In the conclusion, my suggestion to paraphrase your idea not only one paragraph but two of them.


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