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IELTS TASK 1: THE PROBLEMS PEOPLE HAVE WHEN THEY GO TO LIVE IN OTHER COUNTRIES


pertiwi02 11 / 8 4  
Jan 18, 2016   #1
A breakdown of the difficulties people have when they move to a new country and how the problems vary according to people's ages is presented in the bar chart. Overall, all age groups experience the same problems to some extent, but the proportion of people aged 35-54 who find sorting medical care difficult is much higher than other.

Organizing healthcare is the greatest problem for people aged 35-54 years old, a problem experienced by 57 percent of the people in this age group. However, only 36 percent of people over 55 years olds find it hard to sort medical care, while even fewer people aged 18 to 34 (32 percent) have this problem.

Thirty-four percent of the youngest age group finds that sorting money is the most problematic. In comparison, the older age group finds this easier, and the proportion who have problems organizing finance is much lower, at 29 percent.

On the other hand, education is considered by fewer people of all age categories as difficult problem. Although only 19 percent of people aged 34-54 are influenced by this, 6 percent of the youngest age and 2 percent of the middle age group experience difficulties to find school for their children.



vangiespen - / 4,134 1449  
Jan 18, 2016   #2
... and how the problems THEY ENCOUNTER vary according to people's ages ... who find sorting DIFFICULTY IN SOURCING medical care difficult is much higher than other PROBLEMS.

...people over 55 years olds find it hard to sort RECEIVE medical care...

... group finds that sorting SAVING money is... problems organizing THEIR financeS ARE is much l...

... as difficult A problem... are influenced AFFECTED by ... experience difficulties to find IN FINDING schoolS for ...

You need to develop your English word usage. You are using the wrong terms for what it is you want to say. In this case, having a dictionary on hand while you are practicing should help you. Refer to the meaning of the word you want to use before you use it so that you will be sure that you are using the correct term for what you wish to say.


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