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Essay about ielts writing task 1 : The process illustrates how plastic bottles are recycled.

camellia24 1 / -  
Jul 19, 2022   #1

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles

The process illustrates how plastic bottles are recycled.
Overall, it can be seen that this is a step-by-step process that is comprised of nine stages, from collecting plastic bottles to producing end products.

In the first stage, used bottles are thrown away and collected from recycling bins. After that, it is transported to a recycling centre by garbage trucks. This is followed by a hand-sorting process to different boxes, ones for those that meet the needs for standards that are required at the recycling centre. Subsequently, the selected bottles are compressed into blocks.

The process continues with crushing that blocks into thousand of pieces, with these tiny pieces being washed. Having been washed clearly with water, they are sent to a machine that is produced plastic pellets. Before transforming into raw material, pellets are heated at moderate temperature. At the final steps of recycling plastic bottles, raw material is converted into end products which are clothes, pens,...
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Jul 19, 2022   #2
The writer should try to meet the sentence requirement for each paragraph. For an acceptable summary overview + trending statement, these sentences should be combined into a 3-5 sentence presentation. These should not be stand alone sentences since the combined sentence presentations are what create a comprehensive summary and understandable trend for the image presentation.

The writer has taken too much liberty in shortening the diagram information. There are many ommitted keywords that should have been represented in the explanation paragraphs. Procedures and final results have also been incorrectly represented within the explanations. Incorrect punctuation marks are also present (a comma cannot be followed by ellipses). While the writer may have used a short presentation, he also sacrificed the clarity and accuracy of his report, the result of which may not be a passing score.

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