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Writing task 1 process: the production of bricks



ngocmainguyen 1 / -  
May 11, 2021   #1

The diagram illustrates how bricks are made.



The production involves six main stages beginning with preparing clay and finishing with delivering.

In the first step, clay is collected under the ground by a machine called roller. Being screened by the metal grid, it is put into the roller, then sand and clay mixture is created by mixing clay with sand and water. In order to be in shape, the mixture is passed through a wire cutter or put into a mould and drawn in the pattern. Bricks are basically shaped, preparing for the next steps.

Thousands of bricks are heated in the drying oven from 1 to 2 days. After that, bricks are put into two kilns - a type of large box, which contributes to make bricks hard in a moderate temperature from 200oC to 989oC, then in a higher temperature - about 870oC. Putting in a cooling chamber from 48 to 72 hours is the final step of producing bricks. Finally, bricks are packaged and can be used for construction purposes.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 15224  
May 11, 2021   #2
You were given an image name at the start. how was the image identified ? It is not just a production. The image should be referred to as any of the following: a procedural outline, a brick making process list, or step by step creation process, to name but a few image identifiers. Your single sentence is not an informative summary as it fails to properly inform the reader about key production points before the final product. You are making an exaggerated claim that is not supported by the image and therefore, misleads the reader, which makes this an inaccurate report.You should not have made reference to thousands of bricks.

* Limited review due to lack of image.
gonzforever 2 / 3  
May 11, 2021   #3
I have done the IELTS test. I would like to share what I have done in my writing task 1.
1. First of all, you need to address the overal case; meaning what do they ask you to write about? start your first paragraph with the main idea of the tasks

2. Second Paragraph, you may start addressing the difference between two or more subjects in the text.
3. Third paragraph, you may start addressing the similarities.
4. Fourth Paragraph, give a brief conclusion covering the main Idea.
Remember, Writing task 1 is all about you understand data and explain shortly and concisely. I remember that they will not ask you to write many things. Just keep the text simple and meaningful and covering all the main idea.


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