IELTS TASK 1 the process of solar power - energy from the sunlight

usage of sunlight energy for heating

A process of solar-powered water heating system cycling is illustrated in the figure based on location options from several stages.

From the initial stages, solar panels ideal is the position angle to the sun with approximately 90%. Afterward, the advantage of these solar panels which located on the rooftop that makes more practice and efficiently while the drawback of that one of those is difficult to clean and fix, but it would be nice if the south-facing position makes it easy to get sunlight and put above ground level. Then thus should are not be obstructed by trees.

A detailed look at more clearly in the previous comparison on the diagram is supplied in many steps. First, solar panels energy is easy to take energy from the sun, controlling by indicator pumps to operate the electricity. Also, supplying electric power before through the thermal fluid to drain water. Ultimately, a heating coil in the passing water tank before passing cold water, then it would be taken out to taps and showers.

Overall, although the starting process with the extraction of energy from sunlight, eventually, showing how to link domestic electricity to the external power supply.

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@King heart
Hi, welcome. Here is my feedback.

There's a lot of confusion when it comes to your general composition of the text. A lot of it is due to inappropriate sentence structure. Always try to recall the fundamental rules of writing when you are making academic essays, especially since this will determine how enhanced your writing will be. For example, the first sentence of the first full-on paragraph was incomprehensible. The phrase from the initial stages should have been omitted, considering that it wasn't really that relevant to the write-up. Furthermore, the line solar panels ideal is the position doesn't make sense. The word ideal in that sentence is used as an adjective, therefore you needed to put a noun afterward to explain on what that ideal object is. For instance, what you could have done was say that it was the solar panels ideal position angle - which would make more sense. I noticed the same mistakes in the second body paragraph.

When you're using transition words (ie. the usage of first in the second body paragraph), you have to follow it up to maintain consistency (in this case, you needed to input first, second, etc.). If you're unable to follow through with this, you would be better off omitting these parts of the writing.