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How to produce power energy using wind turbine with its proper location


badafebriani17 34 / 44 1  
Oct 27, 2016   #1
The diagrams give the information about how producing power energy using wind turbine and that located in 3 different areas. The equipments that needed are a generator, blades, wind sensor and a computer. Overall, wind turbine which are located in hill and sea produce more power of electricity. However, the wind turbine located in the sea is not spoiled the scenery.

Process installation a wind turbine is began from build the installation. First, a generator, blades, wind sensor are placed in the top of tower. After that, the installation is connected by a computer to transfer the sensor which are cathed by wind sensor from wind's pressure through the blides. So, the turbine can be rotated and a generator can be activated to produce electricity.

Oh the other hand, wind turbine can be located in hill, sea and near domestic. When wind turbines that are located in hill and sea can produce much electricity power, at 1,5 megawatts. Then, the wind turbine is applied in housing just produce 100 kilowatts.

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In conclusion, producing an electricity that using wind can use a simple gerator-installation. If you need more electricity power you can modify with applying it in strategic area.




Pramudia27 34 / 55 2  
Oct 27, 2016   #2
The equipmentsequipment==> uncountable that needed are a generator, ...
... which are located inon hill and sea produce ...

... transfer the sensor which are cathed cashed by wind sensor ...

... turbine can be located inon hill, sea and near domestic.
... that are located inon hill and sea can ...

overall = in conclution
In conclusion, producing an electricity [...] with applying it in strategic area. ==> you have written it in introduction, so you do not need to write it again
Anna94 47 / 56 3  
Oct 27, 2016   #3
Hello,

... information about how producing>>produce power energy
The equipments that needed are [use] a generator, blades,...

Process installation a wind turbine is began...>> Instalation process of a wind turbine is began....

First, a generator, blades, [and] wind sensor are ...
... the sensor which are cathed[cathed has different meaning with catched, so be careful, may be you means catched, not cathed] by wind sensor (...) through the blides >> blides has not meaning, you may mean blade.

If you need more electricity power you can modify with applying it in strategic area. >> remember that you cannot put pronoun in WRITING TASK 1

Gluck
ifraanisa05 44 / 70 6  
Nov 1, 2016   #4
Hai bada, here are my thoughts for you

The equipments that needed are a ...
equipment is a uncountable noun --> the types of equipment

Overall, the wind turbine which areis located in hill ...

... located in the sea ishas not spoiled the scenery.

... wind turbine is beganbegun from buildbuilding the installation.

... installation is connected byto a computer to transfer the sensor which are cathedis caught by wind sensor (...) through the blidesblades.
WasishaSisha 16 / 20  
Nov 1, 2016   #5
Hi badafebriani17,

Here's my suggestions:

- The diagrams give the information about how producing power ... ---> you can utilize another advance vocab such "regarding".

- wind turbine and that located in ;

- The equipments that needed are a generator, blades, ... ----> avoid shopping list word in academic writing.

it should be use verb 1
- the wind turbine that located in the sea is not spoiled the scenery.
- ... a wind turbine is began from build the installation.

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mardian24 46 / 75  
Nov 2, 2016   #6
Hi bada, I want to make some comments

1. ... how producingproduce power energy ...
You need a verb after 'how', so producing should be replaced by produce

2. ... The equipments that needed ...
Equipment is uncountable, hence just write 'equipment' without s

3. Overall, wind turbine which areis located in hill ...
Because there is only one wind turbine, you should use singular verb.
are ---> is

Thank you
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