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The production will receive assistance to provide perfect products - manufacturing stages


Mann_ms 9 / 20 5  
Feb 6, 2015   #1
The diagram below shows the typical stages of consumer goods manufacturing, including the process by which information is fed back to earlier stages to enable adjustment.

The flow chart illustrates the several parallel stages of goods manufacturing, and the process of production is regulated based on information feedback. Overall, what stands out from the diagram is that manufacturing of the good depends on the information comments of research.

The first stage in production of goods is raw material and manufactured components are kept in storage room. After that, the process passes through the production planning which production planning will accept packaging design from designer department after receiving command from product research. Despite production planning process, the next stage is assembly process and inspection respectively. The After inspection, the products follow the testing process prior to entering package stage. Following that, the products are ready for distribution in the dispatch section and eventually are sent for sale.

Besides that, the production will receive feedback to provide perfect products. The stages of giving feedback stat from sales that offer comments to improve the production planning and market research. The production planning, on the other hand, then swings feedback for storage department. Another feedback comes from market research that gives comments for advertising, packaging, and design. However, design can receive feedback from testing too.




somasalims 15 / 27 5  
Feb 7, 2015   #2
The first stage in production of goods is raw material and manufactured components are kept in storage room. After that, the process passes through the production planning which production planning will accept packaging design from designer department after receiving command from product research. Despite production planning process, the next stage is assembly process and inspection respectively. TheAfter inspection, the products follow the testing process prior to entering package stage. Following that, the products are ready for distribution in the dispatch section and eventually are sent for sale.

-'the production planning which production planning will accept packaging ' should be 'the production planning which will accept packaging ' because this is adjective clause and 'which' is connector as well as subject of the clause.

-'Despite ' is not suitable in the sentence. I think that 'After' is better or delete 'Despite production planning process, '

Besides that, the production will receive feedback to provide perfect products. The stages of giving feedback stat from sales that offer comments to improve the production planning and market research. The production planning, on the other hand, then swings feedback for storage department. Another feedback comes from market research that gives comments for advertising, packaging, and design. However, design can receive feedback from testing too.

-misspelling


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