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IELTS-TASK1 : PROPORTION OF ADVANTAGES AND DISADVANTAGES IN FAIRMONT ISLAND, ACCORDING TO VISITORS


Nofrinorman 27 / 17 8  
Nov 20, 2015   #1
A proportion of the most general benefits and drawbacks by survey of visitors in Fairmont Island is represented in the two pie charts. Overall, it can be seen that high cost of living tremendously disadvantages for visitors rather than other problems, whereas the main benefit for visitors is the local community.

The high cost living has a high percentage of visitors who claim to dislike at 45%, then following by entertainment at 30%. Weather becomes the third ranking that visitors believe its drawback at 20%. The latest standing of disadvantage for holidaymakers is food quality with a very small percentage at 5%.

Turning to the most visitors liked, a significant proportion is seen in the two aspects of advantages. The people exceeds at 40% and the scenery exists at 37%. A minority is witnessed by culture at 12%, which it brings benefits for travellers and it almost has similar number with good accommodation by 1%.




broibra 17 / 19 3  
Dec 7, 2015   #2
Hi, let me try to give you some suggestion for this writing.

A proportion of the most general benefits and drawbacks by survey of visitors in Fairmont Island is represented in the two pie charts. Overall, it can be seen that high cost of living tremendously disadvantages for visitors rather than other problems, whereas the main benefit for visitors is the local community.

It is my suggestion.
The two pie charts illustrate the most common drawbacks and benefits of Fairmont Island, according to tourist opinions. Overall, it can be seen that while holidaymakers like the occupants, high cost of living is the main reason that may deter tourists from visiting this place.

hich it brings benefits for travellerstravelers and it almost has similar numberS with good accommodation by 1%.


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