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The proportion of total residents in India, China, USA and Japan with prediction for 2050

nadiraapsari 1 / 1  
Jan 28, 2021   #1

IELTS 1 - The Percentage of the total world population

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.
Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
You should write at least 150 words.

The chart illustrates the proportion of total resident in India, China, USA and Japan in 1950, 2002 and prediction for 2050.
Overall it can be seen that China has the highest population over the period. Initially, majority the trend of population around the world was decreased except for India.

In 1950 and 2002, China has the highest population among the other countries at (23, 20) relatively, while in 2050 India projected will have the highest population at approximately 18. India stood at 15 in 1950 and increased slightly at 17 in the next 52 years, and predicted to increase slightly at 19 in 2050.

The lowest population was Japan. It started at about 4 in 1950 and predicted to decrease gradually to almost 1 in the next a hundred years. USA has the third lowest population among the other. It stood at around 7 in 1950 and then decrease slightly to 5, and will be predicted remained stable at 2050.

Holt  Educational Consultant - / 13,876 4563  
Jan 29, 2021   #2
You know what? This is an example of a well reported chart. The only missing element is the lack of a proper identification of the image provided. You were given a bar chart, not just a chart. The image description needs to be specific because the reader will try to create a mental picture of the information you are providing. So being image specific can really help in that aspect. You did a good job in the summary, save for the incomplete image description. For a 160 word essay, you were able to present the necessary information, comparisons, and predictions. This is the kind of essay that focused, as best as it could, on the clarity of the information presentation rather than the word count. You did a very good job. It is clear, concise, and worthy of more than just a passing score.
OP nadiraapsari 1 / 1  
Jan 29, 2021   #3
Thank you very much for the feedback, Holt.
I will try my best to always improve my writing

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