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# Proportion of World Expense, Amount of The world Population and Utilisation of Sources

yus72 6 / 6 1
Jan 19, 2016   #1
The pie charts below show World Spending, World population and Consumption of Resources.

The bar charts bellow illustrate proportion of world expense, amount of world population and utilisation of sources in the four countinent and are calculated by percentage. Overall, it is important to notice, The percentage of asia people is the highest compared the others. On the other hand, the people who live in USA & Europe show dominant in consumtion of sources.

Move to detail, with total population at 28%, people in America and europe utilize resouces at 60% higher than people live in the other continent containt of asia, africa, and the other continent at 72% but consume source just 40%. It mean in america and europe double of twist compared with total in habitan in asia, africa, and the other continent.

Turning to world spending, eventhough food have percentage at 24% but it is till lower campared other expenditure taht have at 40%. Whilst transpot expenditure is in the third position wit percentage at 18%. The lowest world spending is cloting with at 60% .

desgit33 6 / 3 4
Jan 21, 2016   #2
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Febri91 5 / 6 2
Jan 21, 2016   #3
Hi, Yus72

Here is my suggestion for your introduction

A comparison of the proportion of the world's expenses and consumption compared with the percentage of worldwide inhabitants is illustrated in the bar charts. At first glance, the proportion of people in Asia is more dominant than others. However, USA and Europe consume more resources than other countries.

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