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Feb 4, 2021   #1

Why We Should Use Public Transport?

In this day and age, public vehicles are increasingly becoming a popular means of transport. Whereas they bring about a huge amount of benefits, there are also problems resulted from these vehicles. The following essay will discuss why we should use public transport more regularly and some issues to be overcome.

On the upside, using public transport is environmentally friendly. In this hustle and bustle world, together with greenhouse effect and global warming caused by humans, the environment is polluted severely. For this reason, if we use public transports such as buses, taxis, ferries, undergrounds and so on, we can help reduce the amount of exhaust fumes and harmful gases released into the air by private vehicles, thus preventing air pollution effectively. Furthermore, public transport is also convenient for people who can't afford to buy their own car. We can take public transport and go to any destination at a low-cost price. Last but not least, as more and more people begin to use public transport, there will be more jobs offered to drivers, that way, the prospect of unemployment can be resolved partly. Besides, in our country, if you have a family member who is a driver, then you can take any public transport without paying.

Turning to the other side of the argument, for many, these vehicles may be quite inconvenient. The first thing is that during rush hours, railway station, underground station or bus stop seem to get bustling, so it's quite uncomfortable when there isn't any seats available and some people have to stand for a long time before reaching their chosen destination. Another major drawback of public transport is that it's really dirty and has low quality, with full of tickets scattered on the floor and messy seats.

All things considered, there are both pros and cons of using public transport. We have to weigh up not only the positive aspect of environmental friendliness, job opportunities but also the negative ones of inconvenience and quality. However, I believe that the advantages will outweigh the disadvantages in current state of the world when pollution is rising, and public transport can get better if the governments pay more attention to improve public transportation system.

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Feb 4, 2021   #2
The complete original prompt for this essay has given you the discussion topics you have to use in the 2 reasoning paragraphs, none of which you used. You did not even refer to the original prompt in your restatement, which means you failed to prove that you understood the topic and how it should be discussed in your written presentation. Going back to the topics you should have used for the reasoning paragraphs based on the original and complete prompt, these should have been:

- Many people prefer to use public transportation while others say that personal cars are the best mode of transportation.
- Excessive use of private cars is considered to be the main reason for the traffic jam in many cities and that's why the use of public transportation is encouraged.

I believe your used the shortened prompt, which does not really provide you with any specific writing points nor proper prompt restatement task requirements. That is why your discussion is not as effective as it would have been, had you used the complete prompt consideration for your writing.

These are the topics you should have used to discuss the pros and cons of public transport. Remember that the original prompt will always supply you with the reasons to use as discussion topics in your reasoning paragraphs. You just have to expand on those reasons. In this case. You not only over wrote the essay (367 words), but you failed to consider the original prompt key points for your discussion. So you wrote a very long essay, but failed to address the prompt as expected.

I would have to point out, just the same, that your cons for public transport is not as well developed as your pro discussion. By the way, try to write no more than 5 sentences per paragraph, that would mean that you would not run out of writing time based on the 40 minute time limit. You should be able to present concise discussions, without overstating information because, as you can see, writing a long essay that does not use any of the original prompt considerations could be problematic for your essay.