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Pros and Cons About Vegetarianism : Perspectives Opinion


mem77 62 / 98 6  
Sep 19, 2016   #1
There are many opinions about pros and cons of being vegetarian. The opinions that agree about that said, being vegetarian same like you choose the side to be a healthy one. Vegetarians are just consumption of the foods which concern on vegetables and they leave the protein from the meat. Being vegetarians besides for saving the rare animals, it has a lot of benefits for people who do that. The first one, being vegetarian can make your body has a good looking. Because they consume a lot of vegetables and fruits which contains much fiber to carry out digestion. Besides, vegetables and fruits are keeping our stomach full much longer and they have fewer calories. The second benefits being vegetarians are to make your body fresh for a long time. Being vegetarian means that to decrease calories from the meat and increase a nutrition and vitamin for your body. The vitamin and nutrition from the fresh vegetables and fruits make your body healthy than before and spared from the others disease.

The people who have a contradictive opinion about vegetarianism said that vegetarians do not eat a balanced diet. Being vegetarian means that you can lose a lot of protein from your body because of protein just has from the animals' meat. The others bad things being vegetarian are you can lose a vitamin B12 and makes you placed a syndrome anemia pernicious. Because of many vegetarians is not brought in the eggs and some milk on their foods. And also being vegetarians makes you lose vitamin D which needs for your body to enter the calcium, because vitamin D is too difficult to find on the vegetables and fruits.

Even though there are a lot of pros and cons about vegetarianism, I suggest to all of vegetarians is not forgetting to eat some meat because of it has a lot of benefit too for our body such as a protein, vitamin B12, calcium, and others. But for vegetarians, not to eat too much to keep your vegetarians program still works.

ryan31 65 / 96 15  
Sep 19, 2016   #2
hello edo
masterclass student
here is my suggestions for you
I hope it works
I think you must use arrange of vocabulary
because I found there are several repetition words

The opinions that agree about that said, being vegetarian same like ...
... consumption of the foods which is(which + V) concern on vegetables ...
Being vegetarians besidesnot only for saving the rare animals, it hasalso a lot of benefits ...
The second benefitsuse your arrange vocabulary maybe you can change it to be advantages being vegetarians are to make your body fresh ...
... and fruits make your body more healthyier than before and spared from the others diseases .
The people who have a contradictivean opposite opinion about vegetarianism ...
Even though there are a lot ofseveraluse your arrange vocabulary maybe you can change it to be advantages pros and cons about vegetarianism, I am suggest to all of ...
Jnur 5 / 8  
Sep 19, 2016   #3
Helooo bro, here my suggestion

1. "Fruit" is not countable,, so you cannot put "s" (Besides, vegetables and fruits are.....) (Because they consume a lot of vegetables and fruits .....)

2. "good looking " it seems that you forget to put a hyphen. It should be like this "good-looking" . We put hyphen, when we want to combine two nouns as adjective.

3. which contains much fiber to carry out digestion. -> If it possible you should use a simple word over a complex word which is make reader easy to read and focus on your ideas. So, you can change it to "has" .

4. vegetables and fruits are keeping our stomach full much longer and they have fewer calories.

much longer is redundant. You should avoid redundant expression, because it has no new meaning to the phrase. So, you can change it to "longer" .

5. Even though there are a lot of pros and cons about vegetarianism, I suggest to all of vegetarians ................

You can omit "there are" to make it simple.

all of = redundant expression.


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