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IELTS: pros and cons of work in other countries and take families together


asmy 3 / 7 3  
Nov 21, 2013   #1
Please feel free to comment, thanks !

Essay question: Many people work in other countries these days. They also take their families with them. Give your opinion about the situation. Do the advantages outweight the disadvantages?

In recent years, the trend of people working abroad is becoming increasingly prevalent. This phenomenon is largely stem from greater job opportunities, better working environment and higher paid. Many of them bring along their family members such as their wife, children, and even parents with them. Such situation has both merits and demerits and will be analyzed in this essay.

The most prominent benefit of taking their family members with them is that family is inevitably an essential part of everyone's life. They can give us support and guidance whenever we face any problems and obstacles. If a person have to work in other country and living alone, they would suffer loneliness and homesickness. Therefore, bringing families together will enjoy greater companionship.

Nevertheless, it is widely agreed that taking their families together have a couple of drawbacks. Firstly, living in other country means that adapting in a totally new environment. Some family members in particular elderly parents, may not able to accustom with the weather, food and culture. They may even experiencing language barrier and as a result, they fail to make any friends which could lead them to loneliness and isolation.

A further disadvantage is that it has certainly impacted to one's own country's economy. This 'brain drain' that involve sheer volume of people from various industries such as financial and commercial sectors undoubtedly has an adverse effect on the country's development. As a result of this, the countries might become poorer due to dwindle in intellectuals.

In conclusion, I believe the disadvantages of bringing their families with them to other country outweigh the advantages. This trend is expected to persist and even increase. Therefore, governments should try all means at their disposal to minimize this deteriorating trend.

Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Nov 21, 2013   #2
Such situation has both merits and demerits and will be analyzed in this essay .

.... the latter part is not really necessary.

The most prominent benefit of taking their family members with them is that family is inevitably an essential part of everyone's life. They can give us support and guidance whenever we face any problems and obstacles. If a person have to work in other country and living alone, they would suffer loneliness and homesickness. Therefore, bringing families together will enjoy greater companionship.

You better give an example of more specific nature.
You write very well. Good ideas, vocabulary, presentation etc. Better pay little more attention to your essay structure that is more appropriate for this task and help you earn a very good score. :)
OP asmy 3 / 7 3  
Nov 21, 2013   #3
Thanks Pahan for your advice.
In fact, I spent more than an hour to write this essay.
In the exam, we are given 40 minutes to write the task 2. I am struggling with the time constraint to plan the ideas, and writing the essay.

Writing under such a stressful condition, my essay certainly degrade its quality even further.
If you or anyone has any advice, feel free to share.

Many thanks :)
Pahan 1 / 1,906 553  
Nov 21, 2013   #4
This is a common issue that most of us who takes IELTS. Set time and practice during practice sessions. The best way to handle it is follow this structure (this is what dumi suggests to others) strictly.
RomanticDog 2 / 7 1  
Nov 21, 2013   #5
Hi there, actually i have the same problem as you have. Without time limit, I probably can write an acceptable essay than usual. And I think your writing should get at least 7 or more in the exams.

I am now printing out the exam paper, and starting write on it while only 3 weeks to my exam, hope we can share some idea to solve this problem.
OP asmy 3 / 7 3  
Nov 21, 2013   #6
Thanks for sharing an excellent sample essay.
You are right, I just have to do more practice, and read more good sample essay before my exam. Practice makes perfect.
Wish everyone good luck !!!
RomanticDog 2 / 7 1  
Nov 21, 2013   #7
Normally, If you can get 7 usually on the daily writing, you may get it lower when you do the IELTS exams due to the reason of timing. Really a problem!
dumi 1 / 6,928 1592  
Nov 23, 2013   #8
Since you struggle with time management, I think this structure for your introduction also would help you organize your essay faster.


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