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The provided maps illustrate several changes of facilities on a tourist destination.


minhkhue 1 / -  
Jul 11, 2019   #1

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourists facilities



The provided maps illustrate several changes of facilities on a tourist destination.
Overall, the modifications have completely brought it with the well-supplied amenities as well as recreational activities in order to attract tourism.
It is noticeable that two housings for tourists have been erected. While the first one is located in the west of the island alongside the beach, the second one is situated at the center of the island. There has also been a construction of a new restaurant in the north which is in the middle of two accommodations. At the center of the island, a reception block surrounded by the vehicle track has been added. Not only surrounding the reception the vehicle track also leads to a pier where voyages on yachts are initiated to make provide visitors with a numerous of breath-taking sceneries. Furthermore, people who go to the island can go swimming at the beach in the north-west.

... Where is the map?

Maria [Contributor] - / 715 275  
Jul 12, 2019   #2
@minhkhue
Hello.

It would be helpful to provide the aforementioned map to help us create a more meaningful feedback for your writing.

Apart from that, from what I can see from your writing, your general flow can be improved alongside your organization of thoughts. Notice how there are portions wherein you could have allocated more space to organize and substantiate. Evade the usage of fillers.

Alongside this, try to also create and use spaces where necessary. For instance, after explaining the differentiation between the two housing sites erected, separate the paragraphs to expound on the locations of the sites. Having these gaps makes the transitions smoother.

Best of luck.


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