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The provided table illustrates about people have expenditure on different goods in 2002


tamtamii 9 / 7  
Apr 25, 2017   #1
PERCENTAGE OF NATIONAL CONSUMER EXPENDITURE BY CATEGORY --2002

Sweden, Turkey, Ireland, Italy and Spain - spendings on various goods



The provided table illustrates about people have expenditure on different goods in 2002 in five different countries. This measurement is in percentage. In general trend, leisure or education figure are the lowest percentage and the highest percentage is food/drinks/tobacco.

To begin, Turkey, Ireland and Spain figure were majority proportion. Turkey figure was the highest percentage in foods item at 32.14%, and in Leisure/education items at 4.35%, but it was second highest in cloth items. Meanwhile, Ireland figure was higher than others except Turkey figure in food items, and four times lower than cloth item and fourteen times lower than education. This also was happened in Spain figure.

Furthermore, Italy and Sweden figure were minority proportion in food items, but Italy was the highest percentage cloth items at 9.00%. Meanwhile, Sweden figure had more percentage in food items than clothing leisure items. The former was the lowest than other countries in footwear items.




restuanlubis 4 / 7  
Apr 25, 2017   #2
@tamtamii
Your essay manage is going with well. Sadly, it is too short only more 2 words, that is clearly that you only write within 152 words, accordance with IELTS information that is to get higher band score your essay should be around 160-180 words.

The second paragraph experience a bit confusion in the first sentence:
Turkey, Ireland, and Spain figure were majority proportion regarding?
Because of these countries not only showed related with one specific good which generated as the major country.

Similar to next paragraph.


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